Read the expression on my face
Look behind the mask
Can't seem to escape this place
I live in everyday
I feel like a broken record
Cause i make the same mistakes
I feel like an old play
Tacky and out of place
I want to break the chains that bind me
and run till i fall
and make a place if there isnt one at all
I know i'm not the only one suffering
Others are wear similar masks in this parade we've made
READ ME!
Cause like a book
you have to look inside to get the story
READ ME!
I can tell you mine if you would just see me
and like too many bad musicals
my heart and soul sing for God and for grace
I CAN'T SEEM TO ESCAPE THIS PLACE!
Being the last person you would think is in doubt
isn't really flattering
cause then its not the real me you know about
So I guess you'll never reall know
Put one foot in front of the other
the famous saying goes
till the end of time
Thats our show
So like many corny movies i end this on a happy note
but leave you with my words to quote
Really read what you write
and see what you read
Cause sometimes it could be a person in need.
Author notes
Song i wrote a while back. I laughed after i posted it cause i tricked a lot of people into reading it. It's had over 200 views, but not one comment so i moved it here. Tell me what you think ^_^
A contest entry
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Well your AN gave me quite a chuckle because I clicked on it because the title felt like it was screaming at me so I guess I fell for your ploy as well
Very well done!!!
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I love your authors comments! It made me laugh at how you tricked everyone. Even though it was sad that there were no comments after so many hits. I'm not a great lyracist, but do think there is potential. I like the concept of your idea. Personally, it seems somewhat bumpy or long in places if it were to be set to music. I would like to sample the music you have it set to for it may sound smoother than it reads on paper. I hope my honest opinion will be well received as a fair critique and not as a malicious put down. I truly think your idea has great potential set to the right music and tweaked with some of the wording. I want to thank you for entering my "The endless contest (or longest contest is more like it)!" contest. This will not be the last time I read your entry. At the minimum, it will be read at least once more during judging.
Ted E
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Tjhis is not to bad. Kind of a rant but with rhyme and meter. Not to bad at all
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wonderful
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Great ideals, think even more could be done by this with expansion on issues of society yes there are even many here would stand together I know!
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wow g=ma i love this bunches it was really good thanks for another great wright i loved reading it love you bunches of bunches..xoxox
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