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Streets of Dispair

Streets of dispair.

Buildings fallen.

rubble on the ground.

Darkness abounds.

 

Within the darkness, shadows.

Shadows moving.

Shadows of men.

Men forever lost.

 

Their clothing dirty.

Their faces without hope.

Sleeping on the filthy streets.

No place to call home.

 

Human flotsam, washed up

on the streets of dispair.

Wraiths, ghosts within the shadows.

No hope, no one cares.,

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Edited
    May 12

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    A striking write indeed, i felt a deep depth in this write, a sorta piercing into heart that brings a bit of guilt to mind(not in a bad way)
    well done on this write and all the best in your future writes and experienses.

  • Icouldonlysmile
    May 12

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    I like it. It flows nicely, but there is that little punctuation error at the end of the poem. It sorta takes away from the quality of your poem. Good job, though.

  • babyalah gold member
    May 12

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    so much power behind your words. I felt what you are saying. Your closing lines to tis write finish's it off brill. Well done to you on this write, keep up the good work

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  • wynd-fyre
    May 12

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    Is this really a kind of poetry you every like? It can be good, but you almost feel guilty for liking it because of the topic. But it a great write none the less. Thanks for posting!

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  • KEPalmer gold member
    May 12

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    Human flotsam, washed up

    on the streets of dispair.

    Wraiths, ghosts within the shadows.

    No hope, no one cares.,


    this last stanza really brings a great closing to your writing in this piece. I liked it very much. thank you for sharing...peace and light, kp

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  • Capt Jed silver member
    April 25

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    Your write has described a rubble strewn ghostly town. The “shadows of men” in the second verse could refer to the dead. When I first read this I was in awe that it reminded me of something E.A. Poe would write. It is sad, but I’m afraid the truth is there are more of these than we realize. Well written, thanks for posting.
    Bless you kind Sir,
    Ron


  • Di Shirley silver member
    April 20

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    You captured the reality of those that live on the streets. I grew up in the eastern suburbs of Sydney and it took me back. When will humanity take responsibility for their fellow man. Well done.


  • plainoljoe
    April 12

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    I do and always will harshly chastise America's treatment of the homeless. If the US spent more time and money taking care of their own and wasted less in futily trying to save third world cultures, we could achieve "One nation under God".

    Joe


  • Gunther gold member
    April 8

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    Great take on the public view of homelessness and it is only going to get worse. It seems that you can't get any lower on the social ladder. We must keep hope that someday the public perception will start to change. Nicely done.


  • magnolia. gold member
    April 4

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    This was very insightful and it can be interpreted in many different ways, war, homelessness, poverty. This was a true tale of destruction and its effects.

    Thank you for sharing this with me,
    kind regards
    Sophie

  • patrick20traveler
    April 4

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    This reflects one aspect of homelessness (the chronic homeless). But there is a good deal of diversity within the homeless community and I was surprised by some of the men and women I met while I was on the streets—the ingenuity and intelligence with which they dealt with the problems they encountered was amazing. There are many programs available where homeless people can get help; it simply isn’t true that no one cares. My heart goes out to those who are homeless through no fault of their own—the children and those with mental problems who are not receiving proper care. We can always do more to help and if your poem inspires people to lend a hand that is a good thing.

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  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    April 4

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    Superb Plus +

    Aye, tis the saddest thing how cold and heartless much of America has become to those who are less fortunate. A most excellent write, indeed. It reminds me of my series on Homelessness.
    Here's the link:

    http://allpoetry.com/list/57521-Homelessness
  • Bob Fox
    April 4

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    POET

    I know I have read and commented on this piece before. But it is worth another read for there is so much truth in your words.

  • chasingtheday gold member
    April 3
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    a good poem, makes me think of the depression of the 1930's but it could also apply to today too as times crush spirits.

  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    February 21

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    Nice job. I enjoyed the rhyme and flow of this poem. It is a poignant view of homelessness. I fear that this condition will increase over the next few years.

    Very well done.

    Mike

  • Veronica Leigh
    February 12
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    This is beautifully written. Wonderful job


  • just mercedes gold member
    January 25
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    Each one of them may be an angel. A nice showing of the reality of what we don't want to see.

  • Mallig
    January 10
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    Very honest and poignant, powerful work!


  • Thor-201 silver member
    December 26, 2008
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    What a sad reflection of reality. Well penned.


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    December 19, 2008
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    I have seen this scene before. It is too bad. I think of the dreams that these people may have had when they were younger and I wonder if they think about what went wrong.

    Mike

  • Bob Fox
    June 6, 2008
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    True

    It seems the streets are filled with despair as we move forward being swallowed up by greed and material needs as other suffer. Looks trendy sadly. And ty for your kind comment on my poem


  • Poet Muse silver member
    May 22, 2008

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    Bravo!!!

    I'm happy to have found this poem of yours on the truth of our humanity today. All the best, Cyn

  • Lady Mak
    May 21, 2008

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    A true reality write

    So very true we live in a society where many buildings lie idle and deterioate, and thousands of people are homeless and forgotten about.
    How sad there is so much sadness and despair in the world today, it seems to be a world where money does all the talking and caring and compassion are lacking.

    You have captured the feel of this situation that exist today for some. A Just and fair government is badly needed, many of us pray for that to come when we say the Lords Prayer, Thy Kingdom Come. Thy will be done, on earth as it is in heaven.

    It tells us in the Bible at Isaiah 65:21,22 And they will certainly build houses and have occupancy; and they will certainly plant vineyards and eat {their} fruitage.

    They will not build and someone else have the occupancy; they will not plant and someone else do the eating. For like the days of a tree will the days of my people be; and the work of their own hands my chosen ones will use to the full.

    A very sad and despairing write with great empathy and caring about the sad realites in todays society, movingly captured by the writer. How comforting to know that one day a just government, ruled by God will exist.

    People will enjoy the real life as it was meant to be in the beginning, for God promises the best is yet to come.


  • shepherd23
    May 9, 2008

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    Shared your pain

    I like this poem and hate that it needs to exist - know what I mean?
    If you'd like take a look at a piece I wrote from the perspective of the homeless or hopeless - Its on my page and the title is "Trapped in Chains"
    again - good work here
    S23


  • chasingtheday gold member
    April 27, 2008

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    a good piece of poetry, well i would say the opposite here to your words to me then, too many periods used here, the verses have a period after every line then at the end you decide to throw a comma in for good luck

    dispair - despair

  • davidwright silver member
    April 2, 2008

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    A great lament touching on an element of our culture lost to the mainstream of life. Good luck omn your publishing venture been there once myself. Happy trails

  • Pisces rainbow
    February 13, 2008

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    your poem teaches awareness of the shame we should all feel , to pass by without atleast trying to help is walking in vain. this is darkness that needs to be put into the light. beautifully written EXCELLENT GOD BLESS


  • frownsnfreckles
    December 21, 2007

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    'within the darkness, shadows' a very effective line, says so much with so few words. The opening stanza sets the scene and creates a perfect image for what is to follow. I felt 'those' would work better than 'the' in the final stanza, for impact.


  • Sandygram silver member
    August 27, 2007

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    Hello, Your words have painted the stark reality of too many lives in this country. So much sadness overwhelmes so many here. Very poignant write. Always nice to stop by and read your poems. You take care, Sandy
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