There’s a lovely bum
That’s in front of me
And I like the way it wiggles as it walks
There’s a gorgeous rump
That’s in front of me
So expressive that I’m almost sure it talks
I’m sure the girl attached
To the lovely bum
Is as pretty as a pretty girl can be
But since I am behind
And the girl is in the front
Then the lovely bum is all that I can see.
If we were sitting down
Having tea or beer
I may like to hear the way the lady talks
But I’m on the way to work
So I suppose is she
All I can do is look at how she walks
All the PC crowd
Will be sure to say
Don’t look at lovely bottoms in the street
But I’m not built that way
I find I always look
At lady’s legs quite far up from their feet
I can fall in love
With a bum that’s cute
And a wiggle as it moves in front me
So I want to say
A great big “thanks to you”
To the owners of the lovely bums I see
Then there comes a point
When the lovely bum
Isn’t going to go the way that I have to go
So I sigh a sigh
And I look around
For another lovely bottom that’s on show!
Author notes
Unusually for me this is definitely a song, I hear it sung in my head and one day I will write the tune out (will take ages I'm hopeless at writing music) and see who I've stolen it from
What was I going for? It's bouncy, fun, probably a song, it rhymes and scans, overall it's a poem!
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Comments
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This was kind of amusing to read and definately your usual write on here lol. Good job on making me smile but ummm your a jerk lmao! j/k Thank you so much for taking the time to enter my contest
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Lena -
oh this is good fun, a madness song perhaps?
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congrats on the honerbal mention, funny and great poem here, keep up the good work, Dont stop writing.
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OK. It’s cute. I can almost hear it being sung by some one with a British accent. In the last line,
you say “another another”. Did you mean for there to be two? If not, please edit one out.
Thank you for entering my contest.
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Thanks for that, shows that we don't really read what we write ourselves very often!
Fixed.
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wow..this is actually kind of funny, and i like your honesty. great job and thak you very much for entering!
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I thin it was very interesting and quite honest, but it didn't strike my fancy. I liked the comedy in this piece though.
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how adorable! I've always enjoyed more gentle words for certain things that are usually depicted rather harshly, so your usage of the word 'bum' in place of more derogatory words is refreshing!
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LOL LOL LOL. So funny and cute. I'm laaughing!! Great job and thanxx for a laugh.
Luv,
Candy
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I just love a nice bum!
Loved it, and yes they do talk, sing ditties too! Well I'm off. Ps the music from the jello pudding commercial would go great with a nice wiggly ole bum and a clever rhyme thrown in for go measure ha,ha.
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LOL
lol this was cute...hey even us girls like to look too,,,
this gave me a laugh today, so thank you for sharing this , I hope to see more of your work very soon , great job writing this one
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lol!
This was a great lighthearted poem. The rhyming scheme was great and I found it quite amusing! And I also thought it was great that you were able to express your fondness for female anatomy so respectably Great job on this and thanks for the smile!
Love and Peace ***~*~*~*Stacey*~*~*~*** -
Cute
Yes I remember when I was younger and at the races and everyone was taller than me . I took a whole roll of film of nothing but guys rears and I laugh about that quite often .
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This is tastefuly done.
My first impression after the first line is how ell this is written and how tastefully. Emotionally I am not into explicitly written pieces and was delighted to find this was tastefully done. There is nothing awkward about it. I can't say any of this is my favorite because I find it all so cute and enjoyable to read. There isn't anything that I would change about this. The title is perfect for this and the first line sets the tone for this in the very best way it's as if when you read it you are drawn to read the rest to find out how it will turn out. The last line isSums up just what the author was hoping for. I am surprised for I really like this poem.
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hahaha!
I love this! The tume I hear is quite catchy. I love the humor too! I also find myself staring at 'bums' when I have nothing better to do. =] You've captured the peeping tom in all of us.
Blessed Be
The Black Boquet
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