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Reasoning's Futility

Deliverance...

 

    how is that complexity achieved

when mania and obsession impale

pestilential contemplation.

 

How and when does malevolence

make rationality, when it beseeches

solely more than annihilation

of self and conscious moral paradigms.

 

When hate seeks hate

at heart's core, how does one

ascertain prudence and quietude

with self, let alone vile and depraved

baited hounds that lay in wait

of unblemished progeny. 

 

The resolution lays in inaccessible futurity  

that cognizance can't precisely link

as psyche and spirit, engage in battle

for soundness of reasoning. 

 

 

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  • Michael P gold member
    May 5, 2008
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    I have read this five times-excellent-simply excellent..peace


  • Luminescence
    March 16, 2008
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    I'm going to be quick commenting because of the abundance of entries, so here is your score...

    Title- 10
    diction- 10
    syntax- 10
    wowness factor-10
    Total-40 Very nice Automatic bump

    Thank you so much for entering and participating in my contest and good luck,
    ~luminescence


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    January 24, 2008

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    This is very sad, it makes me want to cry. It's beautifully written though and very expressive, you are good with the English language!


  • O.o
    December 24, 2007
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    Well done, this is a brilliant piece of work. Thanks for entering.


  • weebabycole
    October 29, 2007
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    this is very emotional x


  • Florida Sunshine
    October 27, 2007
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    Wow~ this is really GOOD!!! I can clearly see why it has been awarded already!!! Amazing write~

    So glad this made it in the round contest!!! Thanks so much for your entry good luck to you!!!


  • weebabycole
    October 16, 2007
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    like this its really good


  • Mezclita
    October 13, 2007

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    ooooh good one... though I can't say I've exactly been there... but, I think I understand... I like the ending a lot! Thank you for entering


  • Glasyalabolas
    October 3, 2007

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    A lot of questioning in this piece, coming across as very painful questioning at that. Whether positive or negative, we always question and often we are left dragging ourselves down with the negative aspect, or at least returning to it and it can be very difficult to free ourselves.

    This piece is very well written, good flow and although very personal it has enough vagueness and use of wording that the reader can read their own meaning into it.

    Also, take no notice of JR in your comments, he's just a @*&^ing &£"$ (self censored).

    Good write and congrats on silver.


  • renizzle
    October 2, 2007

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    Beautifully crafted piece, great word choice. The thoughts being expressed here are profound and deep. Well done! But I'd reccomend bolding or changing your font because it's kind of hard to read.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    October 2, 2007

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    i would like to thank you for sharing your talent with me through this wonderful write. i wish you well in the contest that we both have entered. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    September 29, 2007

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    Questions that reach deeply into the soul and demand contemplation. Very moving and sadly familiar! Loved this write.

    Love You~
    Az


  • Number 13
    September 24, 2007

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    This poem is simply amazing, you do have a way with words. Hehe because my schooling wasn't the best I had to look up most of the words but that's okay, I need to learn new words :] I love all of the emotion put forth in the poem, you can truly feel it as you read. Thank you for entering <3


  • penman gold member
    September 24, 2007
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    Excellent

    Such a powerful poem, so full of energy and emotion. Best of luck in the contest.


  • zt
    September 24, 2007

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    In reading this for insight, it looks like you have yet to make peace with all that happened. I hope that the damage that was done is not irreparable.

    In reading this technically, the poem is somewhat difficult to read. I know that this is in both the Personal category and Pain (which I'm guessing is really more Anguish on your part). As such, I hesitate to give you a critical review of it. Ask, if you are interested, and I will offer my observations (for what they are worth).


  • luna-midnight gold member
    September 23, 2007

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    omg this is amazing, as i predicted, lol, i picture this would be something that would be in shakesphere, which means that you've reached ultimate perfection, lol, even though i'm not too intellegent, for i'm only 15, those words fit o'so well and i just loved readin it, thank you for suggesting it!


  • SeeInBlackAndWhite
    September 22, 2007

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    I personally like this one a lot it has great imagry it flows well while being intelligent at the same time, and thats reare, good luck


  • Arizona Sunset
    September 19, 2007

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    cryptic...When hate seeks hate

    at heart's core, how does one

    ascertain prudence and quietude

    with self, let alone vile and depraved

    baited hounds that lay in wait

    of unblemished progeny.

    l loved this stanza
    I can feel the struggles of the soul in this piece, perhaps because I have some of my own...Excellent job, and another amazing write from you...


  • Touchof1der silver member
    September 15, 2007

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    This makes me want to open up your skull and crawl inside your mind. Each line is so emotive and moving, it left me literally frozen in place. I really don't know what else to say… this is just absolutely amazing. You have a wonderful talent.
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • They Say Shannon
    September 9, 2007

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    I like how it's sort of a question the entire way through that ends up being answered.

    Sort of like a passing of wisdom, I suppose.
    The grasp on vacbulary was rather nice.
    Some pieces I think overuse it to the point your mind goes blank but I think you mixed it up with difficult and easier to understand words which made it interesting but didn't loose my attention.

    I did enjoy the first stanza most I think although they were all equally good.

    Thanks for entering, although you didn't follow a rule of mine so I'll have to DQ you.
    I'm sorry. :/ Thanks for entering though!
    And good luck with your writing. <


  • Celticmoon
    September 1, 2007

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    It's a complex simplicity of questions and answers that drive us to do everything we do. the whys, hows, whos and such. We are driven by questions with no answers seen. It is those answers that lead our actions and sometimes they are right and some are wrong but either way we don't know which is which until the actions come into play thus bringing us back to the simple yet complex solution of which action to take.

    This si quiet the intriguing piece. I am certain many will take it in a variety of ways. Some making it personal to themselves and such. no matter as each will find something within to think on. Bravo!


  • islekine gold member
    August 27, 2007
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    Another great one.

    Write on!
    *PEACE*


  • darkwitch
    August 27, 2007

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    this is a beautifully written poem
    I like how you made me see everything
    with your words for I could and like
    that a great deal

    DW

  • zorman32
    August 27, 2007

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    Reasons

    I'd need a dictionary and a week to pull out all the implications of the words you wrote, but still it was a compelling read. (I'm thinking it's cryptography...worked well).

    Reasons are just seasons of perceptions on display.
    Treasons aren't seasons of intelligence, no way,
    they're actions of allegiance to another persons sway.

    Hope you get it all sorted out.


  • leo2
    August 27, 2007

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    I'd probably be pissed too if I understood it. I do hope you can find resolution to an obviously distressing situation.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long

  • MxA
    August 27, 2007

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    This is extremely deep so wonderfully written, and the wording is great, so many emotions of sorrow placed in this. Hope things better for you, nonetheless thank you for sharing


    MxA


  • cutekitten789
    August 27, 2007

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    i feel like im missing something in this poem mama... if i see u again id like you to explain it...i love it... id just liek to understand it more


  • stavykm gold member
    August 26, 2007

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    I relate to what I can understand

    Mania yes and the visual took my breath away!! I love the style of font you used and the whole page. I need to learn more vocabulary to understand all of the poem, but I pretty sure I understand for I suffer from some mental illness!! No crap from me!! Reasoning's Futility I think that is perfect for sure. WOW soundness from dilverance yes I totally understand the poem or the meat of it anyway.


  • innocence jaded.xx
    August 26, 2007

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    Ohhh wow.

    This is absolutely ahmazing and your words definitely get to the heart. There's so much sadness and hurt in this. The picture also goes well with this piece.

    "When hate seeks hate
    at heart's core, how does one
    ascertain prudence and quietude
    with self, let alone vile and depraved
    baited hounds that lay in wait
    of unblemished progeny."

    Those lines really stood out to me. I'm not good with meanings of words, so I had to look some up, haha but this was really great and your choice of words was just wow. You definitely put me in awe :]
    Greattt write ! Loved this.


  • arafura gold member
    August 26, 2007

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    futurity...

    Very deep and thought provoking! I am not sure I fully understand the thoughts and feelings that went into the penning. But I do see the pain and the passion moving behind the words... great work which makes one think! Well done!


  • fiddler55
    August 26, 2007
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    Sorry, I rather like it

  • The Exercated
    August 26, 2007

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    <.< >.>
    And people thought I was a good poet...hell, at least I've something to look up to; Gimme a year or so, and then maybe I'll come up with something as deep. I've seen parts of the abyss in my life, but this proves that I'm still green behind the ears.
    (btw, I wouldn't mind some tips ;D )


  • SexyAngel0418
    August 26, 2007

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    WOW... This is an awesome poem!!! You did a great job on this... It is so emotional and heartfelt!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth

  • Florida Sunshine
    August 24, 2007

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    This one brought a tear to my eye... I can feel this coming straight through to the heart. I DO understand this feeling ~ I battle similar battles everyday.... silently.... I share with no one.... cause No one will ever understand....

    Beautifully said..... Try to be the phoenix!!! "And out of the Ashes.... " LIFT up!!! Fight FIGHT FIGHT.... and be strong... cause folks do care. !!!!!


  • grannyeri gold member
    August 24, 2007

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    Amazing verbiage you have used in these lines - these feelings are so intense and deep that one feels you have been swallowed up and can't get out. Trying to rationalize something like this doesn't seem to work, so I hope that by writing about it you will soon be able to let it go and move on to cheerier things.

  • Suzanne Dia
    August 24, 2007

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    I tend to ignore hate..it's a waste of my time to give and to receive it as an emotion. Besides, it scares me..love and hate are way too closely related.


  • Random Goldfish gold member
    August 24, 2007

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    Wow...pages of the dictonary must be encoded into your hands because that's a VOCABUALRY! This was very powerful...the picture, the words, just the whole thing. Good work...


  • Sinfully Yours
    August 24, 2007

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    I love your vocabulary! What words! And such meaning! I'm sorry for your troubles, and your words are very intense. Great job!
    Miss Marie


  • Star Shine
    August 24, 2007

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    Your third stanza is the most profound to me, and I love the wordplay and word choices you have used in this.


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    August 24, 2007

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    This was very well written. Your word usage is fantastic and you really let the reader feel your words.
    I think we have all been were you are, or at least some of us have. It was good to vent it. Great job and keep penning.
    Soulful Woman


  • Desire gold member
    August 24, 2007

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    Oy!

    Holy Moly~
    Powerful piece Twiny and You certainly brought forth some images that bring me to tears
    ~*~
    When hate seeks hate
    ~*~
    Thank You for sharing this one Beautiful~
    Takes Strength to do so and I so admire
    You for that Strength!!

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

  • cherchezlafemme
    August 24, 2007

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    That is highly genious. Reasoning is two associated processes, searching for such reasons and giving them when you or somebody else has found them. Oh yea a third one in gaining understanding of reasons that somebody else has given is similar. What i get from your poem is if you confront a problem with a pratical one or theoretical or a response one, solving is bound to involve some cogitation. The psyche becomes perfunctory and must bring to mind further relevance in the light of the answers. Compose activity in finding reasons with justice can play a rational inquiry who emphasize empiricists like the Greeks. You reason well when the reasons that you find or give favour the belief or action or response they are presented so standards are required for measures in a solution. It`s a proceess or a production of an abstract entity called an argument with rules and principles in good argument and attempting to go beyond inductive observation. You are right, good reasoning is an art has no science. I love the pic. Totally nurturing for both my hemispheres.


  • Doomsday Clock
    August 24, 2007

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    First off, excellent use of language. You master the words with ease and grace.
    Beautifully put together, I can't fault this at all.

  • eternal-devotion
    August 24, 2007

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    Extreamly Deep

    I will not do an indepth comment on this as I can't say that I understand this very well. The depth of it is disquieting for me. Emotionally I feel drained by this.


  • quantumsurveyor
    August 24, 2007

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    Inaccesible futurity is surely the keynote of understanding in this heartrent poem. And we can't do a damn nothing about it, can we? or am I being too depressed about the problem? A strong and deep piece of writing.


  • plainoljoe
    August 24, 2007

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    Truly a most powerful write you have here. Your words stir my thoughts towards how can such chaos come from where there there should be justice and order

    teh Satyr


  • cherche -d -ame
    August 24, 2007

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    And before I hear any crap from anyone here on AP

    crap-crap-crap-crap-crap-crap !!!!!!!!! So there and now what are ya going to do about it?

    I am really sorry something has you so upset......like Mike said "BREATHE". You can do it.......lay down flat, put your hand upon your diaphragm <-----SP ? and feel it raise and lower itself 1-2-3-4-5-6-7-8-9-10-inhale - exhale [and then get a voodoo doll and stick those pins whereever you might think they belong
    love ya and got to go for now.....[needed the dictionary for this one]
    zzzz
    reenie


  • Tattboyspet
    August 24, 2007

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    very intense write my friend and I enjoyed it ... a little different to your usual love and lust 'gushiness' but I enjoyed this anyway ...
    As for the crap that u don't wanna hear from the people here on AP - YOU BETTER BELIEVE THAT YOU'RE GONNA STILL HEAR A LOT MORE CRAP FROM ME!!!!!


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    August 24, 2007

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    Michelle, I can only say I wish you could take a breather and 'count to ten'.

    regards
    Mike


    • HeavenScent4U
      August 24, 2007
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      I could count to 265 zillion and it wouldn't put a dent in the difference sadly enough but thank you for being a concerned friend be well and be blessed


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    August 24, 2007

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    hmmmm, to be honest i think this is strong and just whoa, keep it flowing and i will not push any futher then that

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