My heart is in your daggered embrace,
asphyxiate my soul assiduously
Degrade me, Deface me, Push me under,
But you always meet me in the shallows
Like a plague, you stole me
Conquering my mind,
I became your voodoo doll
To torture,
As you please
Author notes
looking for ap family..would like to be the ap sister
A contest entry
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"But you always meet me in the shallows"
Is a very nice line. ^-^
I like the poem! Nice job.
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thank you
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my fav so far
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wow
this is awesome!
I love your word choices.
"Asphyxiate my soul assiduously" is freaking brilliant!
LOVE IT!
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I liked your first stanza very much and as this is free verse - it is not neccessary but I almost wished that the second one was just as good as the first one.
I felt that the flow was really good and normally that's what I look for in poems - so that second verse somehow dissappoints me..
Good Luck in the contest and thank you for entering
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thank you for sharing your talent with me through this wonderful write. i wish you well in the contest that we both have entered. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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This is a great poem. Can you please put in your authors comment box what member in my family you would like to be. Thank you
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thank you
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omg i wish i could write like that please keep it up! any tips for me??
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lucidity in the abyss
It is deep that one must dig to find that this reflection could be that of any living thing. For the master abounds in all places including our very own minds, for where would one foster such hindrance to free will but from within.
Let your mind relenquish in this sweet embrace as slave would to master in all of its grace.
I like it, I like it so.
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awesomeeeeeeeeeeee.
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Really great write! short but well done! keep it up and I cant wait to read some more of your poems!!
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Simple and sweet, thank you for the entry!
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thank you, much appreciated
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