Why do we feel this way?
Like we want to die every day.
Is it something instilled at birth?
something that makes us feel lower that dirt?
I don't know nor do I care
I think people commit suicide because of a dare
A dare to be recognized
And a dare to be immortalized
In the peoples eyes who didn't except them
For who they really where.
I'm sorry,
Did I offend you sir?
Tough luck, eat shit.
I almost died because of this.
I was someone whom I really wasn't.
This drove me to insanity
And just to want someone to hear my plea!
Yes to go down in history,
Just to have someone remember me.
For what i really wasn't.
Author notes
i feel like this because i have tried to commit suicide. it was because i was tired of pretending to be something im not just to be accepted. i wanted to die because i had no real friends. now i am lucky to have many friends whom i am myself around. if u dont like me then screw u to.
Please tell me what you think
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its beautiful!!
I can understand the message behind this.. many people who commit suicide are made in martyrs because of it and everyone says of how "i wish i loved them more... spent more time with them" etc.. if i could turn back time
but if they could turn back time nothing would have changed...!!!
i can really relate to this
nice job..xxx
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u got it. that is what i was trying to say. i wanted to be "imortalized" because i didnt feel loved. now i know that aint nothin but bull. thanx fer the comment!!!
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This is good...sad as well...
("For who they really where"--Probably should be "For who they really were")
Aden Recreated
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havent tried to commit suicide, but i know what loosing friends mean. Great imagry in this piece.
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thanxs wicked. im glad you havent. trust me death is no fun. i died and was brought back by the damn shocky thing. it hurts a lot. ne ways i am glad i am still alive though. hahaha! this makes me love the shocky thing. kinda contradictory aint it.
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I'm glad you're alive little bro.
smiley faces are not appropriate for this one so I will abstain this time.
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wow, i realy like this, its well writen and something which i can relate to.
well done
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WOW! I love it! Very powerful and so full of emotion. I can relate to this whole poem. I was 15, when I tried to kill myself. My family actually said I would never do it. They were wrong.
If there was one verse or lines that reached out to me more it was:
In the peoples eyes who didn't except them
For who they really where.
I'm sorry,
Did I offend you sir?
Tough luck, eat shit.
I almost died because of this.
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srry bout that professer was comin, but i wrote those liones cause i was talkin bout this at school and a teaher came up and said i was offending him and tried to put his two cents in so i told him off. preciate the comment
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haha. yeah my so called friends didnt belive i would either. i was 14. and yeah i wrote those lines cause
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This is so dark and sad. But please don't try to commit suicide again, who would I talk to then? You are appreciated. Huggles (Even though it's dark it's still a very good poem )
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hmmm you say you can't write dark poetry, then ahh whats this then? lol you did a really good job with this.
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