Are you really a stranger?
I see your face so full of light
A face so familiar so true
When i saw your face
My heart started to unravel
My life made sence
You are no stranger
You are my past
nothing but a photograph
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eh, just a simple poem
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wow. very interesting end. i was not expecting that. But i like how it ties up the poem nicely.
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interesging.....like this a lot---especially the opening line....
Are you really a stranger?
nice conclusion
luff,
me -
"A face so familier so true"
In this line, it should be "familiar" and not "familier".
A very simple poem, yes, but I think you got a feeling out that we all know. I like how you end it by saying it's a photograph. It made me think back on old memories. Great job! -
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Simple indeed, though not as simple as you think. The ending made this small, seemingly unelegant poem, into a really good piece of work. Your past is not a stranger, but a photograph. How did you come up with that?
One challenge. Try for at least a longer poem. For your poems have meaning, quick and to the point, but, it limits your talent a little too much. But, as is, your are on the path to really good, then, great writings. -
i lyk this one but i think ive heard it be4 in maths lol wuv u April xx
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wow. such emotion with so few words. good job.
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