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Fiddler's Green

 

 

When the ghost ship came to rest at harbor
an old man descended the rotted plank.
Scraggly hair had not seen a barber
and the smell of fish was heavy and rank.
His face was lined with the cruel wind's creases,
cut into his skin by the salt and brine,
and his worn clothes were tattered to pieces,
ne'er seen a washing or a drying line.
With one oar slung over his left shoulder
his journey began to Fiddler's Green.
Where the dancing girls never grow older
and the sky is always clear and serene.
Forward he walked into storm tainted skies
away from the sound of the seagull cries.

The sea soon faded to a salty breeze
masked by the heady breath of flowers
that rustled the branches of rotten trees,
tall as the weather worn, crumbled towers
that he traveled under through wind and cold,
far past the cruel memories of the sea
and into imperfect towns, young and old.
Yet no person asked what the oar may be,
as his quest continued for perfection.
A thing as futile as catching the air
or holding the hand of your reflection
that looks out of the mirror in despair
at porches bathed in the sun's golden glow,
never been touched by the cold sting of snow.

Hope dwindled to embers as years slipped by
and the hearths went cold in those dusty inns
that were abandoned in early dawn skies,
as sad songs echoed on the violins.
Visions did dance in the old sailor's eyes
as he collapsed onto the dusty street.
He forgot Fiddler's Green and her lies,
all the cruel words woven from deceit.
Like the fool card strewn to the cracked earth,
and bones shaken by fortune's skillful hand.
Moira weaving the fate's death and birth
and etching it in a beach's cold sand
where people look for life's amazing tales
as they still cling to a ship's tattered sails.

His quest for Fiddler's ended that day,
and so life's secrets were left in the gloom.
Long lost with the old knowledge and the fey.
Interred deep inside this old sailor's tomb
that lies in the cradle of creation,
never seen by the petty human eyes
that only look at the desolation,
evermore until the day the world dies.
One oar carries men around forever
like a boat stranded in the ocean's waves.
Lives are claimed by this futile endeavor,
and are buried in shallow country graves.
Lying halfway between heaven and hell,
where men are caught by the Fiddler's spell.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

2007RC055

Fiddler's Green- the happy land imagined by sailors where there is perpetual mirth, a fiddle that never stops playing and dancers who never tire.
Fiddler’s Green features in an old Irish legend, to the effect that a sailor can find the paradisiacal village by walking inland with an oar over his shoulder until he finds a place where people ask him what he's carrying. This legend may have some of its origin in Tiresias' prophecy in Homer's Odyssey, in which he tells Odysseus that the only way to appease the sea god Poseidon and find happiness is to take an oar and walk until he finds a land where he is asked what he is carrying, and there make his sacrifice.

Moira- Moira is the name of a single goddess of fate in Greek mythology. She was turned into the three goddesses of fate (the Moirai) later.

This was the first time I ever wrote a sonnet and I wrote a sonnet chain.
First Sonnet- describes the decent from the ship and at the volta turns to talk about the search for Fiddler's Green.
Second Sonnet- talks about the search for Fiddler's Green and at the volta turns to talk about how this search is futile because perfection can never be found.
Third Sonnet- Talks about how perfection can never be found and at the volta turns to talk about the metaphor of the Fool taro card. The Fool card means the futile search for the secrets of the universe, a thing we humans can never find.
Forth Sonnet- talks about the metaphor of the fool card and at the volta turns to talk about the significance of the one oar. In a boat when you only have one oar you just go around in circles, like the sailor was doing.

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Comments

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  • Frodofan silver member
    August 15

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    An interesting piece. I like the references to myth and legend and the story is good. Sort of a realistic look at a dream. Inconsistent meter, but good story.


  • Ryno
    March 23
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    I hope you havent give up on form. This was AmAzInG.


  • Celticmoon silver member
    January 12

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    I remember this piece. I read it when it was placed in B Chandler's contest. I was stunned then and still I remain as such. Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you!


    Blessings
    Bel

  • Seraph
    January 7

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    A masterful work! This poem is deep and entrancing. Loved it from beginning to end! Thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest!

  • Bad Bill
    December 28, 2007

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    I admire your ambition in penning this sonnet sequence and the tale captures the imagination with ease.

    Bill

  • Virginia Logsdon
    December 27, 2007
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    Wow!

    You really did a fantastic job writing this!I could see what you were writing about!


  • Nam
    October 23, 2007

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    I only had a problem with one line in the beginning but it's really not a big deal, and not really worth mentioning. Other than that: this is an excellent poem.


  • bethan-gaze gold member
    October 2, 2007

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    This is exceptional and I just want to congratulate you on being one of a handful to get an honourable mention in the Raven contest - your talent has been recognized - see where it takes you! Blessings ... xx
  • Raven Judge
    September 29, 2007

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    I simply love the blend of historical imagination you have conjured to tell a analogous tale of that must be, at once, futile and necessary for us all to undertake. I say that is necessary for the quest you discover is also a quest towards personal meaning. When seek out "the secrets of the universe," as you write in your author's notes, we are inherently seeking out an understanding of what those secrets mean to us. Your framing of this piece in a historical narrative allows the reader to see how far we have come, and, paradoxically perhaps, how terribly far we have left to go to find even a glimpse of the utopia we seek.

    Thank you for your entry.

    ~Das

  • earthstar
    September 23, 2007

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    I feel you capture the myth with a style that compliments it very much. For those who do not read myths the author notes will help them to understand where the story comes from. I think you gave it an added depth to it. I felt like I was apart of this myth. What it might feel like if I was in that place. Very well done. Your form and content is very well done. Good luck on the final round.

  • Lavender mist
    September 9, 2007

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    Amazing!

    Must time and talent went into writing this fine poem! An adventure to savor!


  • Northern Raven
    September 6, 2007

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    With or without author notes, this poem is a delightful tale which completely captured my imagination from beginning to end, but in this case I am pleased that author notes were included because they give a far greater insight into the story as I am not familiar with Fiddler’s Green. Many parts of the world, including the British Isles are steeped in legends and folklore and the Irish contribution to these is vast and varied. What I find intriguing about such tales is that many are often based on facts that were passed through the generations in song or story form long before they were ever in written form.

    I think this sonnet has been well generally well crafted though on reading it through several times I became very conscious of “the” being overused where it would be possible to use an adjective, possibly to meet the syllable count of each line, but it may have been the author’s intention to add emphasis to the following nouns by this concise method. Areas that I find pleasing in this work are a story that is comprehendible, cohesive, allows the readers imagination to grow as the poem progresses and also that each sonnet flows smoothly with logic into the next, while the moral of the story appears to be “don’t waste time chasing your tail.” I feel that time spent reading this work is time well spent.

    Congratulations on reaching the final round of the Raven Contest 2007 and good luck with this entry.

    Northern Raven

  • Game Master
    August 30, 2007

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    Wow very very deep and interesting, I like the very last two lines for some reason. Very creative I like it
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