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Elemental [haikus]

An ember exists
Resisting the cold of me
My bitter Winter

Dawnlight silhouettes
beams that race across the clouds
over morning skies

A leaf on the grass
Beholds no less a beauty
then those on the tree

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  • Judith Chandler
    November 11, 2007
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    nice use of the form

    I especially like the last stanza.


  • Riftkin gold member
    September 10, 2007

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    nice one you have here
    and you know just what is best to hear
    like it a lot that is true
    and now that I am done I am blue

    Riftkin


  • Swan song gold member
    September 8, 2007
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    This is an excellent chain of haikus I like the last one most of all and will read this again


  • Bluebook Pet
    August 23, 2007

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    An ember exists
    Resisting the cold of me
    My bitter Winter

    -My favorite part-(Arouses my imagery)

    A leaf on the grass
    Beholds no less a beauty
    then those on the tree

    -My least favorite part- (There is something....)