Driving rains gather
while silvery beads splatter,
dancing on sidewalks.
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A blue jay slumbers
soundly in moonlight's caress,
her tummy cram-full.
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Still waters shimmer
like embossed glass, bedazzled
tranquil reflection.
Author notes
What I find the most rewarding about writing haiku is being able to capture a single moment in time with just a few words. For me, it's about creating lasting memories. I hope that I never reach a point in my life when I don't notice what's going on around me. There is true beauty in nature.
A contest entry
- MORE HAIKU ANYONE? by Swan song.
800 points, ended September 8, 2007, 32 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very lovely haiku. I love each one for its unique imagery. Congratulations on HM.
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You have the right idea and these are very good haiku I will be happy to read them again for they are very good
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There is true beauty everywhere one looks. Nature is great and people fascinate me. This is a great poem you have written here. Thank you for your words.
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Terrific haiku, lovely and serene
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lovely imagery knight well done very serene pp
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OH, how beautiful! i agree!!!! i love noticing the small things in nature and appreciate all of it... well, most of the time... i hope. lovely haikus.
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Wow, I just posted this!
I love it! I posted this not a half hour ago, and I got two comments. How neat is that! -
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VERY!
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Oh I really like this. This is an amazing piece of work thank you for sharing this with me goodluck in the contest and best wishes xxx
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Thank you so much.
Wow! That was quick! I just posted it. I just finished up with the still waters haiku in this chain a few minutes ago. I wrote the other two this morning. I saw a blue jay last week over at my brother's house, camped out on a branch, and that sparked the first one. I rarely see blue jays. They are gorgeous birds.
I wanted to give the impression of cloudbursts with the driving rain haiku. In my neck of the woods, we have this saying~ "We don't tan; we rust."
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