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Mistakes and the Green House Effect.

Skipping sincerities,
It's all about the fantasy.

Painting pictures on my face,
Dropping names in bombshells;
Ready to set fire to anything that
Walks by.

Lipstick litter
Lining the ground
As trash and treasure.

Cash;
Melting in the pockets
And dripping exposure
Through fixations and memories.


Lust is draping eyelashes
And touching anything tangible
Within reach.
Thick and luxurious-
It's what we're looking for.

Oh boy,
These nights are dull
Like your eyes
And we're pretending
Rainbows exist
and Promiscuous hopes
Are really only dreams,
Landing on curled toes.

Words are slipping into
Night
And cold air is escaping
Breath in
          Clouds of
          Puffs of
          [Inhale;Exhale]
          Ribbons of Messes,
Falling apart
And needing mending.

We're only a heartbeat away,
Darling,
Lets share phone numbers
And Trash cans.
This doesn't really mean a thing.

Author notes

I'm really sorry if this is longer than 40 lines, Darling.
I hope I won't be DQ'd 'cause of it?



Mm.
So anyways;
This was for a contest based on prostitution.
I'm actually quite proud of it as an overall outcome for the subject.
The point was to be more abstract rather than literal and I hope I managed to get the point across?



Mm.
Maybe this isn't so wonderful.
=X

Ahah.
We'll see.


<3

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  • AshtrayBaby
    August 28, 2007
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    Ahh. The one line over poem.

    It really is amazing. Really really really.

    "Words are slipping into
    Night
    And cold air is escaping
    Breath in
    Clouds of
    Puffs of
    [Inhale;Exhale]
    Ribbons of Messes,
    Falling apart
    And needing mending."

    Fuckingggg gorgeousssss.


  • Exodus gold member
    August 24, 2007
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    It's only one line over so I think I'll let it slide. Hell even if it was over by more I'd probably let it slide because this is better than wonderful. It's super-uber-mega-WOW. Thank god someone understood what I meant when I said "metaphor". And you didn't try and turn her into a drugged-up, knocked-up, slut. Thank you hun, this was just awesome.

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