I f**k everything up
It just isn't right
Shakes, stutters and stares
No legitimate reason
Love, hate and confusion
All because of you
It comes out all wrong
Nothing makes sense
Friendship is re-ignited
Then snuffed out
Trapped in a dark tunnel
No light at the end
Author notes
This just describes how I am feeling at the moment. There is really nothing else to say besides what is already written.
Please tell me what you think
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Oh wow have I ever been there!
The good part is that it gets better and as long as we learn the lessons from what we go through we assured to be free from having to experiance it again.
I really like this poem.
It's very powerful and expressive without getting to involved, leaves the reader with something to think about.
Thank for sharing this with us!
Really great read!
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Seems like you have had alot on your mind.Thoughts like this need to be expressed and you have done a really fine job of getting it out and saying it so acurately.Sounds as if you just need a break.Time off to relect and get new insight and hope.
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How we all seem to hink like this at some time in our life - no matter what we do it does not turn out right. Easy to read and understand what you are saying here. Good title that tell us what's coming next.
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This is a very good poem! My favorite part was 'Trapped in a dark tunnel
No light at the end'
I can relate.
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i really loved this poem
i like how you got right to the pointt with it. you didnt mess around. i can easily relatee to it as well. i've felt that way too many times =[
you mess up and theres just too many feelings consuming you. it sucks.
keep writing hunn <33 -
My favorite part of your poem was:
Love, hate and confusion
All because of you
It comes out all wrong
Nothing makes sense
Friendship is re-ignited
Then snuffed out
Take care!!!
Becks -
This is a very good write. You presented your thoughts quite well here. There is a lot of emotion behind your words. I was hooked till the very last line.
Well done Poet.
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i like it!
great write!
loved 'Love, hate and confusion
All because of you' that part!
keep up the good work, amazing poem!
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i like it
This is a great poem. Also a frightening one (because i know who it is about)
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Wow...
Wow, Shayna...this write is really powerful and mature. I guess taking Cameron's advice helped - without forced rhyming, your words flow and are easier to connect to. I can feel your emotions rather than just reading the rhymes (even though I'm a big fan of rhyming anyway, it really is tricky to do...I still can't after all this time!). I wish I had the talent to write free verse like you. I'm really impressed.
I'm also sorry about whatever's going on. If you need to talk about anything, I'm always a click or a quad away.
Great write, as always, and keep up the good work!
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