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A family vacation and murder investigation

The overlook of the Waterfall was blocked off
No one in or out without my permission
Said the officer in charge
This is now to be treated as a murder investigation

This is the crime report
This morning a family of 5 came up to the lookout
Watching the waterfall flow beautiful and free
The unnamed adult female looked over the fence
Then she fell into the raging waters of the river
We asked everyone what happened

They all said she just fell over

Her sister in law said it was her weight

That had broken the fence

We seached over every square inch

No evidence did we find

 

They will file for us

A missing persons report

The investigation is closed

It is clear to me

No body

No crime

This just looks like an accident

Hopefully she will surface soon

 

The family did not take this well

They are all in shock

A beautiful day for a family outing

Then tragedy strikes

 

We left them with our card and number

You can call anytime

We will keep you informed

On any new leads

 

I thought to myself as he walked by

Remembering what he had said

You cant prove murder

Without the body

And just between you and me

The hungry Piranha 

I threw in the water

Took care of her for me :)

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Part 2

I really dont like my brothers wife

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  • Angelflower
    May 5, 2008

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    yummy...lol.. poor piranha probably had problems after that!!! hehe.. this was so flippin funny!!! I couldn't hold back that big smile after reading this..lol. great write TIA!!


  • TwilightDazzles
    October 21, 2007

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    Hahaha I am glad I am on your good side...damn piranhas lol!! This was great just like the first. Thanks for sharing, best wishes


  • stinkletoes
    September 28, 2007

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    I loved this one just as much as the last.It was funny and kind of mean.lol.Whats the next poem,a part three.lol.Congrates on the silver.You earned it.


  • Arizona Sunset
    September 20, 2007

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    lol well I will watch myself, with you tossing about hungry piranhas...lol loved it


  • Rheea gold member
    September 14, 2007
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    smacks of "good bye Earl" lol I love it put themm all together in a list


  • aboomer silver member
    September 2, 2007

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    lol, lol. Am cracking up here! Great write, great wording, kept me in suspense - then cracked me up. Boy, there are some people you really would almost want to throw in with the piranah's.
    Loved it!
    Congrats on the silver.

    • Starz of Heaven gold member
      September 2, 2007
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      Thanks hehe I cant get rid of my sister in law in real life but I can though my poetry lol


  • queens1
    September 1, 2007

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    Great!

    Held me in suspense until the end. Piranha, indeed!
    The Author notes made me laugh.
    Patty

    • Starz of Heaven gold member
      September 3, 2007
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      Hey there thanks Im glad you like it and yeah I loved the Piranha.This was fun to write Thanks for the comment.CJ


  • Kindredblood
    August 27, 2007

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    lol a niecly dark and delightful poem, love the sinister catch heh, reminds me of a national waterfall here in new zealand, when people have gone over into those, not all were seen again, lol but for the life of me i can't rember the name of the falls, go figure, lol anyway awesome 2nd part to the family vacation gone wrong, i'll have to rember to stay on your good side, dont feel like feeding the fishes lol.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    August 26, 2007

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    You are a riot. This was great.
    I have a few people to send your way LOL

    delila


  • tawk gold member
    August 24, 2007

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    I agree you have such a funny sense of humor and you are a very talented writer. What a wonderful story I so love the ending. I did not see Piranha's coming lol. Again excellent write. Good luck in the contest


  • Melodies
    August 23, 2007

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    HAHAHAHAHAHA!!!

    oH, Jeez... what a funny poem/story about getting away with a terrible crime! I am tickled with this and think you have such a funny sense of humor and talent for writing!

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