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All My Doves Have Left Me

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All My Doves Have Left Me




You cannot drown on sorrow
                        for
it is too thick to swallow whole

It must be choked down piece by piece
leaving the airways cut off

Darkness cannot devour you
                        for
we humans are too fluid;78% water

We must be sucked down in ravenous gulps
tasting of salty tears, cavernous fears

You cannot shed your skin
                        for
our shells are too thick with pride

We must be cracked open in agonizing manners
like side walking crabs, or mollusks

                     Alas, all I can say is this...


when I learned to love I choked
when I lost it, I drowned
I was devoured, coughed up
and cracked open like some legume
only to see in the end...

                     All my doves have left me







Author notes

My dear friend, a great writer here, Nicolette, inspired the title of this. I hope love and peace find her soon.


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  • Nicolette gold member
    August 24, 2007

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    I love the title of your poem !! Seriously, Billie Jean... this one touched me - and I know you'll understand why... all our doves have left us, but perhaps they left a few coos behind... This touched me with its sadness - that choking, drowning sadness - yet it is still beautiful, elegant, poignant and again.. beautiful. Hugs to you...

    ~ Nicolette


    • SerenityNChains gold member
      August 24, 2007
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      When you told me that on a few occasions, it touched me. So when I started to pen...those words appearred in my mind. Thank YOU for sharing such beautiful words. Yes this is sad, but us poets find beauty in sadness don't we? Hugs to you my dear friend. I am so happy you liked this.

      Love andlight,
      Billie Jean


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    August 23, 2007

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    Wow. I cannot even describe the amazement I have at this point. This was such an excellent poem, poignant in it's description of sorrow and pain. This was an excellent piece. Thank you for entering my contest!!
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


    • SerenityNChains gold member
      August 23, 2007
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      I was so happy to find the contest. It is a wonderful picture, and this was what it conjured. Thank YOU so much for this opportunity, and for the softness of your comment.


  • PerfectImperfection
    August 23, 2007

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    This is such an amazingly powerful write! So well composed, the flow and breaks in line add so much feeling to these painful bursts of emotion. So often we feel that we lose a part of ourselves, when another walks away... But in actuality we can only hope to gain the knowledge that can make us whole. I adored this piece!!!


    • SerenityNChains gold member
      August 23, 2007

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      I knew you would understand this write. Your words carry so much truth my friend that it weighs down this page to a mere ton! Thank you as always for the wonderful comment, and understanding my soul.

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