On the other side of Jupiter
There is a place to live
In the year 2026
And days of old are gone
Shoulder to shoulder
A sea of humanity
Pills have no taste
Ten thousand credits for a ride
And the people sing:
We are the people; we want to make it right.
We are the people; we want to stand and fight.
Let’s stick together; out of the cameras sight.
Let’s stick together; it soon will be alright.
But days go on
Star gazing, wishing
Air used to be free
It’s cold, no sleep
And the people sing:
We are the people; we want to make it right.
We are the people; we want to stand and fight.
Let’s stick together; out of the cameras sight.
Let’s stick together; it soon will be alright.
Government control
Pollution, human waste
The hope is:
On the other side of Jupiter
And the people sing:
We are the people; we want to make it right.
We are the people; we want to stand and fight.
Let’s stick together; out of the cameras sight.
Let’s stick together; it soon will be alright.
A line with no end
Delusion, destitute, depression
Prayers crushed, only hope left is:
On the other side of Jupiter
And the people sing:
We are the people; we want to make it right.
We are the people; we want to stand and fight.
Let’s stick together; out of the cameras sight.
Let’s stick together; it soon will be alright.
In a list
A contest entry
- On the Other Side of Jupiter by Melodies.
475 points, ended August 25, 2007, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is very different but it isvery unique also.
Kind of out of the norm for you but none the less it is deserving of more than bronze love.
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Wow, I love the refrain! A line that really made me think: "Air used to be free"... You just know we're gonna have to pay for it someday.
I enjoyed reading this! Keep on writing!!!
Always,
Cassie (Who is STILL forever in your debt!!!!!! )
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interesting. you take the issues of a tiredly expanding civilization and transfer it to another planet. nice use of the prompt. confident not many brought this sort of english to the circle. i like the hook...oddly familiar. people always lookin elsewhere outside of themselves and each other for their salvation..on the other side of jupiter wow...a picture of civilization's ongoing self delusion. let's go somewhere else and make it better..only to manifest the same age old fuckups. and then look for the next territory to "improve". stirred a great deal of thought with this. another excellent write
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My daughter tells me, "Girls go to college 'cause they have knowledge, and boys go to Jupiter 'cause they're more stupider." Apparently, she was quite prophetic.
Reminds me of the Martian Army in, "The Sirens of Titan."
Rented-a-tent-a-tent-a-tent
Rented-a-rented-a-tent!
And they all marched on Earth.
It has that futuristic art-deco feel to it. In like it. Very stylish.
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This is REALLY good! Creative & imaginative piece
This reminds me mostly of the song "In the year 2525"
and it is laid out like lyrics too
Nicely done!
Best of luck!!
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Holy Moly!!
Now You have taken me where no man has taken me before
Wooooooooo hooooooooo
...does future dance...
Forget Captain Kirk
Love this one and what images
-for the kiddies-
Thank You for sharing Your Mind!!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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So this is what the future holds in store - seems like the earth all over again. No matter where man goes, he will become greedy and take the spoils ruin the environment so he will have to look for somepalce else to reside. Liked the lyrics you have penned here and the picture that served as inspiration for these lines.
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Beautiful write. This had a great flow to it. It would make a good song, to me it had a country feel to it. This poem also brings images to the reader's mind. I'll probably still be around in 2026. Let's see... I'll be 41 then. I also like the title of this. It's thought provoking. It made me think of Saturn's moon Titan, as it is thought to be a planet that might have life, even if it's just at a microscopic level. Titan I mean, not Jupiter. This piece seemed to have a lot of hope in it. Good luck in the contest.
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GASP!! I wish I could see this performed!
This would make such a good stage presentation! One performer could say the dialog and there could be a chorus to sing the music part. 
It's so much fun to read! 
Very impressive, dear poet! 
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Wow this is a master beautiful job here,
Wonderful words to fit this photo Amera.
We are the people.
Beautiful
Good luck in the contest this is a master indeed
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ahhhh, nicely done as usual Amera! 2026...I might still be around...perhaps..and being as this is just a heartfelt write I have a reply to it, in a way, only in a way.
http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/3335800
Dad
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This is a wonderful poem. You did a good job on it and I really enjoyed reading it. Great job and keep writing!
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WOW!
This is an amazing piece
You used so much creativity in a prompt that my brain simply went blank. You created a piece that may well speak the truth. History does seem to repeat itself. With the world, as messed up as it is today, one would only assume a grim outlook for the future if we don not start changing today. However, your piece also reflects this meaning for hope
"A line with no end
Delusion, destitute, depression
Prayers crushed, only hope left is:
On the other side of Jupiter
And the people sing:
We are the people; we want to make it right.
We are the people; we want to stand and fight.
Let’s stick together; out of the cameras sight.
Let’s stick together; it soon will be alright."
I love this piece. Thanks so much for sharing.
I wish you the best in the contest
Take care,
Love
David
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