The world is on fire
This autumn night air is thick
overstimulated
by the rain and the electricity the clouds exhale
the flesh of the ground - soft and waterlogged
Daylight returns in delusional blinks to taunt,
to tease,
to madden
As pretty as mercury beads, the rain
or maybe petrol, to strain the wound
where the lightning strikes
This Autumn night air is heavy with sirens
red lights, like weak soldiers trying to combat the white goliaths in the clouds
Somewhere beyond the view of my front porch,
the world is on fire
Author notes
I wrote this the other day while I watched a storm. It was the first one of the summer for me. All others this year (all two of them) have been in the very early morning. And it was worth the wait. This storm was spectacular. It was violent and prolonged. Odd, most all the lightning that came out and down from the clouds struck in almost EXACTLY the same place. And about ten minutes after the storm started, I started hearing sirens - more than one. At least three ambulance and one fire truck.
It was an interesting night.
This isn't the best of poems... but it will do for now. Slowly but surely, my muse is returning.
~ suzume
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wow... great job on this! nice one and best of luck in this contest!
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thank you very much. especially for taking the time to comment. i'm sure, being a prewrite contest, you've got quite a handful of entires to read.
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ya I do, but I read and comment on every one of them. This one was really good though!
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beautiful
for some reason reading this made me think of the sarah mclaughlin song "the world is on fire". i have seen nights like this and i know what you mean in the description. this is very well written.
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i like your imagery and i think it's clever how you made the daylight into a person, who's able to tease things.
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Very good write. I like your descriptive context, and the way it flows together so well. Very creative.
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Thank you much. That means something to me because lately... I just haven't been able to write at all.
So thanks. ^_-
~ Suzume
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