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Small Steps

I need small steps to reach my dream
Upward the path of the clear stream,
Drink the water flowing from it
And breathe the air of the summit.

Time won’t help me on my journey
My past hinders this long tourney,
But with small steps I’ll reach my feat
And breathe the air of the summit.

Though I need rest, I am not tired
Though I move slow, I am inspired,
With these small steps, success I’ll meet
And breathe the air of the summit.

I need small steps to reach my dream
And breathe the air of the summit.

Author notes

sunshine

A Kyrielle Sonnet consists of 14 lines (three rhyming quatrain stanzas and a non-rhyming couplet).
Just like the traditional Kyrielle poem, the Kyrielle Sonnet also has a repeating line or phrase as a
refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet
consists of only eight syllables. French poetry forms have a tendency to link back to the beginning
of the poem, so common practice is to use the first and last line of the first quatrain as the ending
couplet. This would also re-enforce the refrain within the poem. Therefore, a good rhyming scheme
for a Kyrielle Sonnet would be:

AabB, ccbB, ddbB, AB -or- AbaB, cbcB, dbdB, AB.

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  • Seraph
    January 1, 2008

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    Nice write with a lot of hope. Good job with the form, though I'm not sure that "feat" and "meet" rhyme with "summit." There are some great lines here, particularly the third stanza. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!


  • leander Moderators member
    December 14, 2007

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    One never stops learning when reading the entries of a form contest actually Kyrielle Sonnet, never heard of it before to be honest, but then again, I'm not really a form writer myself so that might be the reason.

    anyway, I think you've done a great job with this one!
    Thanks for entering and I wish you the best of luck.
    Leander


  • Amera gold member
    August 25, 2007

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    I love the Kyrielle Sonnet and this one is penned perfectly with style and grace. Your flow is smooth and you used the form to its full potential. Well done!

    Love,
    Amrea ♥


  • mommyof2
    August 24, 2007

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    Lovely form and message. I have yet to experiment with sonnets, but I'm familiar with them.
    Though I need rest, I am not tired
    Though I move slow, I am inspired,
    A couple of my favorite lines! Well done


  • FallenAngel09
    August 24, 2007

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    Thank you for your entry into my contest, your talent and hard work are very much appreciated. I love the smooth lines to this poem, the very elegant way you moved from one to the next in an even flow, I am always so in love with poets that can do that, as I have an extremely difficult time with it. Great verbiage, and good luck with the contest.

    Your Host,
    Tiphanie


  • 2lullabyhaven
    August 23, 2007

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    I think you have did a very lovely, elegant job in this contest. I wish you much success with it. lol


  • Olivias Violin
    August 23, 2007
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    Excellent message!

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