My heart pounds wildly
while waves of worry rise
within the silent spaciousness
of my contemplating spirit
Black Panther’s penetrating presence
scrutinizes the bottomless depths of
my shivering soul
pulling my panicking senses
inwards
to a place where
petrifying phantoms of fear
mercilessly haunt
my spirit’s holy shrine
Drowned in the
putrid pool of melancholy
I refuse to face
the morbid masks of
past’s grinning ghosts
Panther’s piercing eyes
penetrate the vertiginous darkness
of my mysterious mind-jungle
overgrowing with
the deadly creepers of negativity
echoing the eerie song of ego
imprisoned by the spinning spiral
of illusion
Breaking the wanton wheel of karma
Black Panther bestows
precious present of prophecy
And while
substance-less thought-waves
voluntarily vanish into void
detached visions
of future potentialities
free from
past’s reincarnating projections
appear on the
immaculate screen
of my
ever radiant mind
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Hello Maa.
This is a great write. An amalgamation of many things. Wisdom, knowledge coupled to metaphors, topped with metaphysical insight, within the spiritual significance of the animal, as spirit guide and totem, all very descriptive. I did have to do a background check on this stuff though, ahhaha, so obviously my knowledge on this is nowhere near yours. Your work deals with the chains that humans have round them from so long ago, little realizing they are the ones actually holding them at both ends, as well as negativity, fear, ego, karma, excellent write Maa. You also touch on the fractal holographic universe, “spinning spiral of illusion”.
A good write Maa, I wish you well on your journey.
My regards.
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One of my favorites of yours.
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thank you, tyler ...
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As soon as I saw the title I felt compelled to read this piece, and its contents made me glad to do so! Your words are beautiful, the subject majestic, and the entire concoction very powerful. A lot of elements make this poem the work of art it is, my favorites being the second, fifth, and seventh stanzas.
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how kind of you to visit and comment ... thank you so much for the clappies as well ...
big hug
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Oh, and I forgot to mention that the picture at the top is amazing as well!!!
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Powerful!!
What an Honor to read Your Wonderful words You have brought versed from Spirit
Magnificent Marion
Love each line~ these lines touched deep
also...
Breaking the wanton wheel of karma
Black Panther bestows
precious present of prophecy
You are such a Gem~~
Thank You for ALL You do
Miss You presence here
Best wishes to You Sweet Soul!
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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This speaks so well of the courage and inner strength bestowed by this totem. To face those things that dwell inside, haunting is probably the hardest task in life. And here, you take the reader on this journey bringing them out on the other side. A very uplifting read. So glad you shared this one! Blue
PS-I note a couple of words that you
might want to take another look at:
'overgrowing' to overgrown??
'Drowned" to drowning??
I just seemed to replace these as I
read to make the tense work for me.
Thank-you for considering...
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Awesome
This piece really draws the reader into the inner meaning of what lies between the lines, and ofcourse within the words themselves. I can appreciate such art work you weave together, and you did a wonderful job here with your imagery, word use, and metaphors. Thanks so much for sharing, much love, and respect! Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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Beautiful transformation. Like the dawn slowly driving away the stalking shadows of the night to the radiance of brilliant sunshine. Skillful work.
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excellent~
This is just simply perfect...
Sorry I haven't been by in awhile sweetie..have really been sick...but feeling better now..this just blew me away as I read this fantastic poem filled with imagery..
I have no idea what spirit animal I am....need to find out...LOL and this should definitely get a trophy for your mantle sweet sis...
Will try and catch up soon...I just posted 2 new ones hope you drop by and see me as well
Love ya sis
Susan~~~
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Your black panther is 'my impartial Soul' who goes around deep inside to find out the mind, its passage through difficult phases to ultimately reach and see the day of light. A beautiful poetic expression has come through out your wonderful poem.
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Oh sis, this is beautiful. My spiritual anamal is the tiger so I certainly can relate. The smooth metered flow is amplified by the wonderful vocabulary. Well done!
Love,
Amera ♥
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Grade A, Rubric score of 94%
Initial Impact/Reaction 10/10
Originality 10/10
Creativity 9/10
Line-breaks/emphasis/flow 9/10
Poetic device/verbiage 10/10
Ideas/metaphors/imagery 8/10
Cohesion 10/10
Understandable/makes sense 10/10
Overall poetic effort 5/5
Emotion/personality/edge 4/5
Last impact/reaction 9/10
Overall, an excellent informative and poetic piece with well chosen and placed verbiage. Again, good luck! Laura x
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A really great poem with a very interesting and apropos vocabulary and well-placed alliteration throughout this wonderful work. Best of luck in the contest.
D.D.M.
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As I read through this I was wishing and hoping for a positive ending and you didn't disappoint me (as I knew you wouldn't! lol) It's an incredible poem and that ending simply soars!
Peace Georgia
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deep into the pshyche
A journey into ones pshyche , a darkness looms
where one keeps away on the fringes of negative thougths that looms ..a.metaphorical journey into
oneself..soul searhing .
deep with the phenomena of surreal.
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This is a breathtaking and beautiful homage to the black panther! I almost think this is a totem animal of yours? Good luck in the contest!
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This is an interesting and quite educational piece with wonderful verbiage choices. My Spirit-Guide is Pegasus, so I understand animal totems and medicine cards. I enjoyed reading this very much sister mine. I shall be back with a rubric grade for this piece before contest closes. Thank you for entering and good luck in the judging. Laura x
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