I sit in my chair,
Surrounded by noise,
By laughter,
By friends,
Then I hear it,
What I don't want to hear,
I hear his name,
And then the news,
He's dead,
He's gone,
I won't ever see him again,
The noise fades,
My friends too,
Til I'm by myself,
Crying, and crying...
I'm in a graveyard,
Surrounded by headstones,
I start to read,
Grandad's first,
Then mum, dad,
My closest friends,
All dead,
All around me,
I cry,
And I cry,
Til I run out of tears,
It hurts so bad,
I try to get away,
But I can't
It closes in around me,
Until I wake up...
Author notes
Option 3
But also a bit of option 1 because it was scary for me, but not the kind of scary that would freak others out...
This is actually a reoccurring dream i was having 4 ages when i first found out my grandad was sick... it scared me a lot...
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Awww...
This is a good poem, the first stanza really got my attention. Good luck in my contest....
Much Love and Respect,
Joci -
before I read
please put what option you are after in your authors notes...Idk if you did write but accidently wrote option 12...but seeing as how you are in many other contests with this poem idk which is which lol -
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Whoops, sorry, I forgot to put my option in, it's there now though...
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Amazing! :D
I love it!
really amazing... i love the creation of atmosphere and the gloomy tone... thanks for writing such a good piece of art!
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woahhh how scary! this is one powerful dream to have over and over again. this poem was really effective. awesome job writing this.
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at first i thought you were talking about real life! wow, VERY good job! that one scary dream!
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wow.... one helluva dream...
i guess it's like you said yesterday
one negative making the positive look better
hooray for life
great poem =)
SeeJ
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This is a very emotional poem, filled with sad feelings of a dream. I know dreams can feel so real, but it all ends when you wake up and realize it was only just a dream. It must have certainly scared you, thanks for entering this and explaining one of your dreams. Great write! Thanks for entering and best of luck
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