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Broken

Opalescent wings now covered in filth
darkness and despair have replaced the light,
Too tired and weary to put up much fight,
no serenade to soothe a troubled soul.

Negativity has replaced promise,
stars are replaced with tears, falling like rain.
Skies are now gray, reflecting heavens pain,
for the angel who is broken and beaten.

 

Her wings weakening, feathers falling 'bout,

she brushes them together, trying to maintain,

seeking wisdom in her  sorrow and pain

so that she may  once again take flight. 

 

 

 

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  • tony yates silver member
    August 25, 2007
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    talented write

    i enjoyed the poem, lovely words and great imagery


  • Pisces Pieces
    August 23, 2007

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    "Negativity has replaced promise,
    stars are replaced with tears, falling like rain"

    Yep, although this refers to differnt things for different people...

    This is a sad expression of the struggle and fight to get back to oneself, but I do detect the glimmer of hope in the last line...

    I truly hope she is able to once again take flight as well, and I know the fight is hard, but I believe she's got it in her and she's worth it to the rest of us too, to encourage and support and fight right beside her.


  • Maddogk
    August 23, 2007

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    Spread those wings and soar to the Heaven's...
    the freedom of flight awaits you!!

    Excellent write.

    Jeffro


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    August 23, 2007

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    awesome

    I loved the hope in this... it's so beautiful. Very well written, great image of the picture. Good luck in the contest.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    August 23, 2007

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    Man oh man this is good. I can really relate to the sadness and sense of failure you have expressed so well. Great take on the picture. Good luck in the contest.

    Jeannie


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    August 23, 2007

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    Wow. This is an excellent poem! I loved the rhymes - they seemed more like a coincidence than intentional, which was good. Beautiful. Thanks for entering the contest!
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~

  • Eusebius
    August 23, 2007

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    bravo

    A deep and poignant piece of poetry...sad and reflective and very nicely done throughout! bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • Grey Mouser
    August 23, 2007

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    With hope to resurge and bring back the light so that she can find the strength to once more take flight, she cast about in the darkness for a glimpse of faith to guide her.
    Nicely written take on the image. Best wishes to you in the contest.

    Mouser

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