I wish i could take it all away
the anguish and pain i have caused you
I wish there was something i could say
but i think our family is though.
we all made some mistakes that day
but i apoligized and said i still loved you
i know a while back i pushed you away
but your my father and i wish you loved me too.
i know your probably still mad at me
but pushing me away will not make the pain better
if you looked into my eyes the pain you can see
when you treat me like you hate me my eyes get wetter.
i know i have done things wrong and lied
but not everything that goes wrong is not my fault
when you say you dont care it makes me wanna die
i have been crying so much i can taste the salt.
Author notes
me and my family had problems because of alot of things i did.i hurt my dad,emotionally.he now makes me feel unloved like he could care less if i was hereand i still love him and it kills me cuz he makes me feel like he HAS to look out for me but not love me.i didnt know any other way to express it except poetry form.
option #1
for the make me feel contest-option 1 and 3
A contest entry
- A weeks Worth... by Wika.
500 points, ended September 8, 2007, 15 entries
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425 points, ended October 4, 2007, 27 entries
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i like it, very thought out. good job
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sometimes it just takes time for things to get better
dont worry everything will be better in the end......
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thank you so much for entering this beautiful poem into my contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Thank you again
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Sad and Beautiful at the same time. A great piece one that made tears well in my eyes. Your emotion is really powerful in this piece.
Good Job!
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this amazing..!!!!
no lie the hurt and love i felt with in this poem was just amazing, im sorry that you have problems with your dad and all i wish you all the best and much love to sweetie..xoxooxx -
Ahh, ya know...sometimes the best things you can do is give the other person a chance to accept and heal. He'll come around. Give him time. Parents don't STOP loving their kids, even when they are mad. As a matter of fact, if he didn't love you so much, he wouldn't be this mad. Just let him know you love him, and then step back.. Just some kindly advice. I wish you all the best,
Jin
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