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kindergarten cubbyhole

familiarity of being
kisses like mellow crunching of crisp yellow-orange leaves underfoot in autumn
her favorite time of year

everything I've become I put into her without my normal premise:
fear+dishonesty=feigned hope

tucked-in safe like believing in Santa
no second-guessing required
she is my kindergarten cubbyhole

she has everything I am and I...

I am not afraid

Author notes

hooray!

but...does it suck?
Written September 15th, 2003

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  • Tiffany
    October 16, 2003
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    Someone being your kindergarten cubbyhole is quite possibly the cutest premise I've ever heard. Very good poem.

  • Haunted Dreams
    October 1, 2003
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    Hey.. how could you think it sux lol it was awesome! You can tell it came out heart and soul.. Great job and keep up the awesome work

    ~haunted dreams~


  • Torn Aura
    September 15, 2003
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    It doesn't suck! ::thwap!::
    Don't say that, you're a great writer, Brandon

  • innocence022
    September 15, 2003
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    Hey Brandon! Yay I get to read something new by you. I really like this because like all of your poems they seem so personal. This is just beautiful..that's the only word I can use. It seems so simple but when you can relate or look back on times when you knew exactly what the author was trying to say..things aren't so simple. It's not black and white mixed w/ grey..it's the brightest of technicolor...dorky some may say..but it's the truth. I always look forward to your stuff...:)

    ~Shanna ~