I stand and begin to gallop
in the open fire
and reminisce
the sweet voices of the choir
I close my eyes and dance
in the glowing darkness
and imagine how wonderful
the world without sadness
I whisper to my thoughts
in the heart of happiness
and kiss
the woman of my dreams
I kneel in the sand and pray
in the paradise of lost souls
and wishing
a forever blessed soul
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Author notes
A great moment "wishful thinking" will definitely make my day. Enjoy
Please tell me what you think
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WOW!! Fantastic poem! Great work! ^_^! Oh and by the way thanks for the comment on my poem!
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Very nicely expressed.
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I adore this, especially the first stanza, absolutely stunning, superbly done I must say,
great!
Alex.
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An amazingly beautiful write. 'I kneel in the sand and pray in the paradise of lost souls and wishing a forever blessed soul' this really touched me. Thank you for sharing. God bless
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Your words constantly amaze me ... you write eloquently but with such incredible visuals. x
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These are some really beautiful thoughts you have
written here. I love the imagery in this. Well
done and thanks a lot for sharing this one here!
Keep up the wonderful work!
Jeremy0826 -
excellent
Oh my such a touching write. A great poem for you to give for contest inspiration.
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ah, yes, I love it when a poet uses kneeling to pray so well in a poem.
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I could sooo get lost in your thoughts here. This is very well done. I could feel your words seeping into my own mind.
♥ Touchof1der -
What a lovely world it would be if this was the case.
This was a very nice poem with good strong imagery
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this is beautiful, I will try to do my poem of it justice maybe even a poem to be one that just goes hand in hand with something this beautiful.
Riftkin -
oh how evocative..yes, yes, I relate...
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I came to this from your contest. I like the smooth read and the wonderful imagery. The ending is wonderful as you are in thanks on your knees.
Totoong mabuti
Love,
Amera♥
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Simply beautiful.
~sugar~
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You have painted such lovely wishes here in this poem, it's very beautiful...
"I whisper to my thoughts
in the heart of happiness
and kiss
the woman of my dreams"
So often we imagine what it would be like to kiss another we love, or bless someone, or imagine a world without sadness. The opening stanza is so engaging, I love your word choices in this poem...
I love this
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Intriguing write of longing... Purposed beat carrying you along, to brighter days - and hope filled wishes; to come. Great write!
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I am sitting here savouring the chocolate I allow myself once a month with a glass of wine reading these beautiful words another discovery I love them .
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this is an absolutely great write with a very positive outlook to have [to daydream about what it is] and to never give up being able to wish for and envision it.Somehow it does not seem as if you are a writing it in a letter form to yourself though....well, not necessarily letter form is needed , but I sort of was looking for you to be addressing yourself. Hmmmmm....and then again , maybe you are...
thank you so much for entering
reenie
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Beautifully written. Wonderful rhythm and flow. A very nice attitude to have. I like it. Good luck in the contest
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i read this one last night and darn, i kept thinking about the imagery on this piece.
'guess it's also wishful thinking on my part..to be with someone....to love passionately...
anyways, love the whole piece..particularly :
I kneel in the sand and pray-
in the paradise of lost souls-
and wishing-
a forever blessed soul.
good luck..
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What a fabulous attitude and what energy to "gallop" through your day. I just love the second stanza especially the last two lines of it.
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