I remember you
like a ghost
of a memory
like wisps of smoke
clouding my vision
I could be wrong
to say you are mine
or at least
that you were
if only once
You are a star
I cannot touch
but dream of
every day
Author notes
Miss and wish
Name:
XdevilessX
A contest entry
- Shooting Stars and Eyelashes by bird-mad girl.
1000 points, ended September 10, 2007, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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very relateable piece!
simple yet so meaningful-- which is just what missing someone is like. "I miss you" holds such depth.
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Thank you very much
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this is beautiful. I loved the words and the flow of it.... it was like a breeze, something you can feel but can't cage. this piece is perfect.
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Thanks!!!
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I was saying about another poem this one it's beautiful
well most of them are
you are like a constant stream of substance
I just sometimes wish i could be reading more of it in a single poem and not chase them scattered like trying to catch pearls falling from a broken string and trying to scatter.
it's not a complaint they're short or simple (which is great - that's how they should be)
it's not a negative critique just a sort of need I feel when I read one and then have to scroll a few days back for it's "beginning" or the "end".
the most important thing I perceive is they're a whole (and that is a very good thing) and it's yourself.
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Lol, I do do that for some reason.
Thank you very, very much.
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i really liked it great job=)
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Glad you liked it.
Thank you very much
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Sweet and simple.
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Thanks
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