Christmas lights in the sky,
snow is falling,
the mud,
appalling.
But after dark,
when all is still and freezing,
the ground goes cold,
and the snow is sticking.
People driving,
looking at others lit-up houses,
enjoying the weather,
taking in spirited doses.
The mud,
now chilled,
makes it hard to take out the garbage,
without being killed.
The little kids,
tucked in their spaces.
while their parents
sit in front of their fireplaces.
The daring go out,
bundled up tight,
and go caroling,
throughout the night.
All are in good cheer,
for it is the giving time of year,
throwing snowballs and drinking hot cider,
and each is aware that Christmas is near.
Author notes
Enjoy this poem-- dont slip!!
~Jibbergabber
A contest entry
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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So nice.
Oh boy how well do I know that when the sun goes down that it is easy to slip up in your own yard. I had more trouble on the driveways and sidewalks with the ice than on the road. Nice poem to read. -
this was a very nice poem with good immagry. It made me feel all christmassy. Anyways, thanks for entering my contest. Sorry it's taking me so long to judge, but as you may be able to imagine, it takes a while to read so many poems and pick out the very best. Merry belated christmas!
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Actually, I think ...
that the rhyming works fine. This is a feel good poem with a humorous slant, which is certainly a good thing. As chugglepuff said,others lit-up houses should have been others' lit-up houses.
Other than that, this isn't bad. I wonder if anybody does ever go caroling nowadays though? I haven 't heard of anybody doing it in years now, which is a shame, but it probably prevents lots of colds and pneumonia.
Anyway, thanks for entering and Happy New Year.
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Some great ideas in this, I like how you show positive and negative sides of Christmas. I think this would have worked better as freeverse, some of the rhymes felt quite forced and also damaged the flow of the poem. The last line was lovely, very heart-warming. "Others lit-up houses" should have been "Others'..." I think, great grammar apart from that.
Thank you for your entry, and for following the rules! Keep up the good work!
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