A needle in the arm taking me to places I've never been;
Losing myself in my own creativity - finding voices telling me to dream.
Seeing things like never before;
Never knowing when to stop - when to die.
Never seeing myself again;
Fallen over like a slug - squish me before I run.
Feeling fine until I fall;
I'm not high - I'm just fine.
Why do you call me names; I'm just fine;
Leave me alone, I don't need you - I'm just fine.
Stop calling me at 3:30 in the morning;
I don't care what you're selling.
I'm just fine, I don't need you;
Why do you care? If I die.
I don't need you nor your God;
I am fine just leave me be.
Go away before I call;
You don't know what I need.
Author notes
'Venom In Our Veins'
A contest entry
- Doctor Blind, my baby's drooling acid.. by AshtrayBaby.
1250 points, ended August 28, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Nothing Boring by cali951.
500 points, ended December 3, 2007, 104 entries
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Wow thats deep its a good poem though
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Thank you.
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Very creative poem. I like everything about it. These lines -
I'm just fine, I don't need you;
Why do you care? If I die.
I don't need you nor your God;
I am fine just leave me be.
Sounds familiar. A great job!
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Thank you.
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Go away before I call;
You don't know what I need.
that's beautiful. completely added a total new look on the poem for me. beautiful job.
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Thanks.
Thank you for reading and commenting.
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Is this personal?
Because I can relate.
Well, not EXACTLY.
But sort of.
You get what I mean.
Maybe.
Anywayssss.
Thank you SO much for entering and I really, really enjoyed this write.
Highly emotional and filled with trauma.
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Sort of.
Not -exactly- what I've been through but along the same lines, a lot of it is just my ability to place myself in other peoples shoes, which is why I usually do not enjoy fighting (because I can feel their side of it, and I end up feeling bad later).
I've always been a little empathic when it comes to things, I can feel what others feel, and place myself in their shoes. I enjoy contests because of that as I get a chance to write things I may not of otherwise.
Thank you for holding the contest, reading the poem, and writing a critique.
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