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feeling so rough

i fitted her out with a kind of emptiness
that left marks not scars for weeks and days
felt like after-effects of a sexual caress
that shivered spine not intentional ways

so after all's left enthroned in sight
i captured her heart with my thought so rough
by looking at glass through beautiful light -
entwined in arms that bled not enough

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this is just... what came out. i didn't entirely have much of an idea what "dirty-pretty" is, either. i'm not entirely sure i want to do too much research to find out.
this poem definitely, i believe, fits the requirement of "abstract", although it's a pretty ... harsh requirement to fit "abstract" with "dirty pretty"!

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  • poeticweaver gold member
    September 3, 2007

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    Wow,

    Lost ya to the dark side.. LOL..
    Well, can't say ya didn't try eh...
    Thanks for sharing, you're scaring me now..lol..

    • lkcl
      September 4, 2007
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      hiya tim,
      ha ha - many of my "dark" poems are quite shocking, i realise!
      there appear to not be many limits on what words can be said
      through me: i look forward to there being none - but i also
      ironically look forward to _nice_ words ha ha bit of a contradiction there i think...