I’m strumming on an invisible banjo
I ask about the twinkling…
The twinkling of my toes
Of my nose
And of my eyes…
Why?
Because associations are being foraged
In the forest of ‘Mount Never-less’
I give my best
I want to unwrinkle my mind
I’ve been crinkled over time
Ho-Hum, Ho-Hum…
For the thousandth round I come
To the grandeur of a giant marbled planet
And how I got on it
My soul speaks…
Does anyone hear sound vibrations?
I’ve found, I feel creations
Such sensations seek expression
Depressions of Hum-prints go down my spine
Winding it’s way without delay
The humming is so smooth and serene
Such supple supplement satiate the ravaging
Of isolation’s cold, lonely touch
No one is actually independent
Intra-dependence is in evidence instead…
Hmmmm…there goes an internal clicking too—
A Sherlock Holmes elementary-clue:
“One day something you hear, clicks with
something that you’ve got inside [of] you…”
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Wow!
How did I miss this one? This is great! The only thing I have to say that is not a high praise of this piece is that in the next to last stanza there is an almost overwhelming sense to it, I think its all those multi-syllabic words so close together. I dunno, maybe that is not a bad thing? It was a very mind twisting piece. Dear Poet, well done, bravo..
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Applause-Applause-Applause!
What a wonderful device you used,
"mount Never-Less"
loved it....and one day something you hear,
clicks with something that you've got inside (of)
you....a Sherlock Holmes elementary clue!
BRAVO! BRAVO! cleverly written, and smartly done too!
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Hey, sorry that I missed this comment of yours (I don't know how it got by me). Either way, I appreciate this wonderful feedback. Thank you so much for it. Glad that you liked it.
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Soulful!
I realy like this piece. It opens up a whole new direction of soul searching for me. Makes me wonder will I ever get to the top of "mount never-less" or will I just climb and climb. On the other hand, if I do reach the top then what else will be left to do? very interesting. Thanks for another good write.
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Hey, Thanks...
Yeah, I wonder the same things. AND...I have been searching for some time now. Nevertheless, when I stop for rest I then return with my best. You'll get there sooner or later. Thanks for the thought...
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yeah ditto...
...u intently repost? well who cares? it was easily good enough 4 a 2x posting!!
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No. The re-post was an accident (I wasn't sure that I sent the first one and didn't even remember it until I read this comment by you). AND...thanks for the comment (on both posts).
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Grrrrrrrrrrrrreat!
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm...i hear something clicking...that's you man...your style is clicking to the beat of another powerful and fast drum kid! Mannnnnn your smooth and slick partner! 1970's style, ya' dig man! This piece has smooth connections and great onomatopoeia! "i want to unwrinkle my mind i've been crinkled over time"...lol...nice flow with strong meaning! "Such supple supplement satiate the ravaging..." Nice!
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Thank you kind sir...
Hey, I didn't expect such powerful feedback. You caught me off-guard on this one. I wrote it last night and the end quote is from my man at work who said it the other day. I told him that it affected me so much that I was feeling like I'd do a poem about it. Last night I did. THEN I fell asleep (exasperated...lol). "1970s style" huh? What is that (lol)?
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