I am the city--
and I never sleep.
Under the sodium glare
of my midnight streets,
I see my children weep.
The dark secrets,
the dreams people hide
in the caverns of their mind,
are an open book to me--
yet I do not chide.
They are my children--
I am the Mother City.
Like all children, they
will sin against their parent.
Oh, I am filled with pity!
They are born
in my concrete womb;
they will live, marry, die
in my bustling neighbourhoods--
and I will be their tomb.
Author notes
A personification of New York City.
A contest entry
- Nothing Boring by cali951.
500 points, ended December 3, 2007, 104 entries
Silver trophy winner
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6000 points, ended October 7, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
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wow - I really like this!! Love your wording!!
Excellent, IMO..!!
best wishes in your contest.
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A rhymed poem with a fine
informing metaphor. I agree that the final stanza is not simply conclusive; it crowns your poem in this wonderful work of personification and metaphor.
This poem almost rivals William Blake's poem, "London".
http://quotations.about.com/cs/poemlyrics/a/London.htm
Also, ABBA:
"I'm the street you walk
The language you talk
I am the city
Yes I am the city you let me be ..."
This is original thinking and creative enterprise with imagery to reinforce the desolation from birth to the grave that a big city can become: an end in itself; a living monster. Thank you for the pleasure of reading your poem.
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Amazing is the word I give to that last stanza,
and really, to the overall concept. I favor
personification and here, you breathe a city
to life. Phrases such as: "concrete womb"
should be singled out for creative recognition.
Blue
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I like this poem its something different and makes a lot of sense and has a good use of metaphors so good job and good luck in my contest
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wow you have just put the city into a whole new light! this is very unique and i like the way i feel when i read it. great work!!
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Original
well done
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