Whatever happened to my smile?
The one I used to wear,
quite naturally apart from
the one thats pasted there?
What happened to the joy,
the excitement of the day?
When I just could'nt wait
to face another day?
I try to tell myself
it will all be ok
Just give it some time
don't give up the faith
So I push away the hurt
I cover all the pain
I muster up the strength
to walk through the rain
I tell myself tomorrow
will be another day
and new opportunities
may well come my way
But today was all the harder
and my stiff upper lip
seemed to quiver at the thought
of my life without you in it
The fatal realization
served to knock me to my knees
while the memory of (me) faded
from your life of joy and ease
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This seems to be a pretty good analysis of my day today.
Please tell me what you think
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And tomorrow and tomorrow
and....until this day is years ago. still a small scar will remain. But we wear them with honor for they represent battles won.....chael I like this .And I wouldn't be qualified to revise your heartbreak.
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Into each life...
a little rain must fall, but no one expects a constant downpour.
Sometimes that's what it feels like. A constant downpour. Like you just can't get a break. You left the rain coat at home because when your day started it was nice and sunny with not a cloud in the sky and then came the rain. But when you open your umbrella, you find the holes in it.
Sometimes we just have to learn to jump in the puddles, get soaking wet and enjoy the nice hot chicken soup that our Father offers us at the end of the day.
Hope you catch the analogy. *hugs*
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Amen whitexrose!
The hot chicken soup is the best part!
Luvs,
castaway
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Tragic, well written
Who was it that said - to love is loss and the tragedy is to not have loved at all. Or at least that is my version of it. keep writing,
Respectfully yours, Cheryl
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aww... no you won't fade away
this is a really sad poem. i feel the same way sometimes, but hey, i'm sure this feeling will be crushed by something that makes you smile soon
very soon! 
this was well expressed, and the emotions were raw. keep penning, i liked it and keep smiling alright
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Wow this was so very well written I could feel the pain of losing a loved one right through to the end. Well done.
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This is dark and sad,yet beautifully written. Reading the comments before posting mine, and knowing your meaning behind this, I can relate to this very strongly. This is an exceptional piece, and my heart goes out to you, Sister.
God Bless,
~I~D~
LisaMarie
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Your smile touched me today so much more than I can say!!
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Wow very dark I think. I love the last two stanzas. Personally I probably would have ended it with "from your life with joy and ease." but you ended it perfectly too. An exceptional write.
-Nick
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Thanks Nick.
Yeah, it is quite dark. I suppose I was in a negative mood! This was about the loss of custody of my children. Guess thats where the last line comes in.............feels like they are happy and I am not. But, just me feeling sorry for myself again!
Castaway
PS,
Guess I thought you were going into the marines for some reason, oops!
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I really really like this. Great Job!
~Phoenix
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