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Permeate





Permeate




This sense of loss just permeates
like rotted apples in the sun
yeah, I realize I'm not the only one


But when I think of all that's passed
I drown on the salt streaming down my face
nothing but bitterness left to trace

I cannot stifle all of these sobs
so I will stifle hope and joy instead
and just lock the demons up in my head

I will tread on, like a tightrope dancer
never looking down, never looking back
give my all, and release all my slack

Nothing left for me to do, I guess
but say a prayer...just a lil too late
and watch my heart as it permeates




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I saw another's write today, and this is what popped into my head. Not to say I have never felt this way, as recently I have, but just do not feel this way now.

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  • utterly amazing,

    simply stunning. Id love for you to read mine some time! =]

  • poetryality silver member
    September 19, 2007

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    Glad you don't feel this way any longer my Sister. It is not good to harbor "bitterness, and pain". I feel these sentiments sometimes as well. The beauty of being the poet that you are is the ability to write them out so eloquently so that we all can relate.

    "I cannot stifle all of these sobs
    so I will stifle hope and joy instead
    and just lock the demons up in my head"


    Ahhh...I have taken that stroll on more occasions than I care to mention. A very emotion filled writ my dear. Glad you've shaken feeling this way. Today the sun shines even brighter in your smile.


    Much Love & Many Blessings ♥

    Renee


  • Blue Rew silver member
    September 14, 2007

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    You give a strong voice to disillusionment at the
    hands of loss. Stated clearly and with words that
    echo with vulnerability...we can see the pain. Blue


    • SerenityNChains
      September 14, 2007
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      Blue,

      Thank you for this wonderful comment. Sometimes art has to bleed to be good. Love and light.

      Blessed be,
      Billie Jean

  • PerfectImperfection
    August 22, 2007

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    This is beautifully deep and powerful. Lines that can comfort those in a similar stance. So very well spoken, with delicate sadness and reverie. Amazing write as always!


  • SpydurPoet silver member
    August 22, 2007

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    Wow. That was an intense read. I think this may be my favorite of yours because it just...it slams the reader with the anguish you portray in it. You did an excellent, excellent job with this. Even the rhymes added to the sorrow.
    Write on!
    ~*~SP~*~


    • SerenityNChains
      August 22, 2007
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      You always leave me such great commennts. Thank you hun. It was just passing thoughts and feelings scribbled on a page. I am so glad you enjoyed it.

      Blessed be,
      Billie Jean
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