Four in the morning
the stove burns
metal pans, pancakes
rising.
Conversations
drifting through
minutes and hours,
passing time
slowly.
Family Guy
playing in the
background, laughter
fills the room
with joy.
Two years of
happiness continue
to grow like
fields of memories,
experiencing
good and bad
together.
Sunset ascending,
a new dawn
greets us with
bright warmth,
beaming.
Never has
bliss seemed to
last so long, but the
smile in your eyes
is enough to
last me an
eternity.
A contest entry
- Give Me REAL by Logans-Mommy.
500 points, ended August 27, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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awwwww this is so sweet. the last verse.. i luv the last verse!!!! its amzingly brilliant!
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Close to home
I love this poem because it seems so familiar. I can read parts and say, "Yeah, I had mornings like that." or "that happens to me all the time."
People in all our variations can't help but be the same.
The poem ends on such a happy note only a smile seems befitting.
Lovely write Kerri.
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This is sweet and vivid. Nicely expressed.
Harrisham Minhas
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what i love about this is that its hard to tell between reflection and reminessance, similar but distinct in poetry. while i know it did not take you the course of two years to write this i still beg the question, written at the place and time? excellent work, reminds me why youre one of my favorite poets, and also why youre published! good luck on the new book!
~~~ektor
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thanks hun, actually it was written on the date posted... just a simple description of our day to day lives
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so absolutly beautiful and well written. I love it. The poem captures the imagination and grants it such a great view. I love it. I repeat, I LOVE IT!
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Excellent
So vivid and powerful. Such wonderful descriptions. Best of luck in the contest.
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its soft and its sweet, perfect. it describes the soft and sweet love of everyday life, and thats the kind of love thats going to last. this is beautiful: flow, excellent; emotions, pure; word choice, natural and uninhibited. wonderfully put together well done. i wish you well
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divine and awesome pure and sweet
honey and chocolate
bravo
Tamara
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it is such a great poem! you love someone a lot it sounds like this is so sweet. good work!
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Yes I do He means everything to me, thank you for your lovely comment
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a better side to life, it's good for me to read this, shows me that at least some see life in happiness, your poem was so deeply tender, describing each moment of a waking day in perfect detail, painting such a wonderful picture, perfect in everyway, and with so many deep emotions woven into this poem with your well chosen words, very enjoyible to read ty for sharing.
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Thank you. There is so many good things in this place that not many can seem to find anymore... It's truly sad when somebody can't see the beauty in the world. Your comment was touching, thanks for that. ♥
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This is lovely. Sweet, tender and I love the dreamy reminiscence of it. A wonderful read!
Best wishes,
Bella
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thanks!
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Yes, thanks, oops lol
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