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Triplets

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triplets
born out of a dream
one hot august evening

yellow pink red

so full of life
so bursting with living force
so young and new
so ready to live
yet so frightened of beginning

shaped soundly in His love
and protection

united by silken threads
woven in conflict
soon to be displayed
for all to admire

yellow of friendship
pink of love
red of passion

ready to burst from closed buds

beautiful
yet
awesome

 

 

 

Author notes

This one isn't sad ... sorry.

"Though one may be overpowered, two can defend themselves. A cord of three strands is not quickly broken." ~ Ecclesiastes 4:11-13

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  • Piccola gold member
    March 25

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    One of my favorite scriptures when it comes to marriage and the importance of allowing, indeed inviting the Creator into it. Thank you for this entry.

  • Blooming Poet
    March 3

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    wow. When i read the title i thought you meant babies and then I clicked on it and wow, it is not what I thought it was. Such a lovely suprise. Great take on the prompt and beautiful pic.

  • Willy Winkler
    November 1, 2007
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    Did you know that the Eastern Brown,

    a most venomous snake gives rise to baby snakes that can inflict a fatal envenomation within seconds of being born. These, too, are creatures of God. It is so easy to dwell on roses. No offence meant, just a salutary reminder.
    PS I do not think snakes intrinsically evil or good.
    In fact, they are protected by law in enlightened countries.
    Dr Derry.

  • carole21
    October 25, 2007

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    united

    lovely images . . nice picture . . "living force" . . a strong poem actually for flowers . . good job !!


  • Starrchild777 gold member
    October 21, 2007

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    Metaphors

    Using the roses as a metaphor was wonderful but, unlike 'Dancingred', I believe the picture distracts from the parable. The power of relationships and their ties are truly interlocked. Nicely written.

    ~Starr~ xxx


  • paperparadox silver member
    October 19, 2007

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    This piece has the delicacy of the rose bloom, and it flows well throughout. I like the line so simply written: 'yellow pink red' Very poetic yet with a curious naivety that couldn't be expressed any better.

    Lovely work. Well done ..


  • DancingRed
    September 26, 2007

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    Initial reaction - 7
    Poetic devices - 24
    Individuality/creativity - 9
    Vocabulary - 6
    Emotional engagement - 8
    Layout/organisation - 5
    Spelling/grammar/punctuation - 5
    Background/font - 5
    Overall impact - 9

    Total score - 78

    Lovely expression in this piece, though I'm not sure if your poem would stand by itself without the picture. It does need that.
    Parts of it seem a little cliched - "yellow pink red", but I really enjoyed the first stanza.
    Thanks for entering.

    DancingRed.

  • DawnBaby gold member
    September 23, 2007

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    Beautiful

    This looks exactly like my multi colored climbing rose bush at home! One of my favorites in my garden. I love this piece, I will bookmark it, will always remind me of my own roses.


  • grannyeri gold member
    September 19, 2007

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    Such a lovely picture, and can see why you would like this prewrite - liked the flow and the lovely vivid visual images this brings to mind when reading. Congratulations on the HM as well,

  • nothinghere silver member
    September 7, 2007

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    This is just a beautiful write, so tender and loving, wonderful way of writing here

    Thank you for taking the time to enter your favourite prewrite in this contest, I wish you the very best of luck

    Karen

  • Kimojuno
    September 7, 2007

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    Wonderfully written with great emotion pouring from it, I love how you took that scripture and brought it forward into a poem, showing your feelings and emotions in such a "simple" (yet VERY beautiful piece).

    Thank you.
  • Virgoan
    August 28, 2007

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    Colorful and wonderful!

    united by silken threads
    woven in conflict

    Amazing lines!

    Thanks for sharing and I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing my friend.

    >>>VIRGOAN

  • Malabu
    August 22, 2007

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    Simply a gorgeous write Jo

    I love the tenderness and beauty pouring from this wonderful poet...oh hummm...I love what your heart spills...

    Mal


  • jaffa-forbes
    August 22, 2007

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    very sweet poem. Very true as well. like the first stanza. good luck!

    jaff

  • pattyann4500
    August 22, 2007

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    Sis, this is a wonderful piece. A perfect take on your verse, and the beauty of roses is a lovely comparison. Good luck in the contest. Love, Patricia


  • blondone silver member
    August 21, 2007
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    A wonderful read love the flow and the imagery is beautiful just a wonderfully written poem...

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    August 21, 2007
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    a beautiful entry.
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