Hidden in a mysterious forest so far away
Where the air is dense and darkness holds sway
I walk slowly lost and unsure of my way
Following a path with a hidden alluring promise
Of freedom and chance to get rid of the evil within me
Between ancient trees so tall and very old
Where the ground is covered in a carpet of mould
Walking upon a packed and stony trail
With each step gases are released into the air
Tainted with dried blood and forgotten tears
I wonder if I am going the right way
I am gaunt and my pores ooze fear
Eyes so dark with a mind barely sane
A sickly aura clings to my frail body
Something within writhes struggling to be free
I know it to be evil twisted and heavily corrupted
I am fighting it with everything I have, but I feel I am losing
In the distance a break in the trees where there is a faint light
Finally is this where I can put an end to this frightening struggle?
But no I am just deceived by another fork in the path
Within me something seems to cackle and laugh
I choose left and soon come across a deep ugly scar
In a bleeding iron smelling mouldy rock wall
Moans of pure agony scream, from within its gaping maw
Rusty slime drips from teeth like rocks filling the opening
I know that I must step forth into this frightening place
Hesitantly I move forward and my heart starts to quake,
Suddenly my ears are assaulted by unearthly sounds,
And as the darkness clears to my horror I see death
Bleeding walls infused with squirming tortured souls
Suddenly all is silent and as one they all turn and stare
I turn to flee but only a lake of boiling blood greets me
The entrance gone my escape an illusion of shattered hope
Now I can hear them chanting join us brother
Feel our pain be one with our eternal sorrow
Then I notice I can no longer move from the waist down
Hands from nowhere have begun to pull me down
Then my face splits asunder with one last gurgling scream
My soul is ripped free and my body swallowed by the fleshy river
I thought I was so close to being free of this nightmare
but somehow I feel that this dream is my actual reality
So when my eyes open who will really be living my life?
By Kindredblood
Author notes
6. write about you...anything about you...just...you
Well is about me, I think my dreams reflect my somewhat messed up life...
I'm sorry if it seems long, I got a little carried away, this dream felt so real, I just wanted the reader to feel and see the visions locked within my dreaming mind.
Have you ever gone to sleep and found no matter how hard you struggled you just couldnt wake up?
In the end only your screams and someone shaking wakes you from the horrors holding you locked within.
A contest entry
- QUICKIE!!!! OPTIONS FOR EVERYONE!!! by XInsanity-FairX.
400 points, ended August 22, 2007, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me your thoughts lay it down straight I can take it.
Comments
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This is a powerful write. It grips the reader and holds them there. It's absolutely wonderful. The pain and torment in your dreams is so vividly described I can almost see and hear it. The flow is smooth as it pulls the reader along for the ride. Love it.
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this is a great poem...and i did manage to read it all the way through without getting bored...which is a first
it held so much emotion in it...so muchtorment so much...everything
it was a great poem...
thnx for entering and good luck -
This is amazing the length well i think it makes it all the better takes the reader to where you are. I have a dream where im falling down the hold and ever ledge i touch crumbles what the heck you know anyway this is a very nice write .
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incredible expression of inner torment..yes I have had dreams I couldnt wake from...sometimes I wish someone would wake me now...beautiful job good luck in the contest
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