As though I am not
where I should be,
I feel different.
A different me.
Conscious, more aware,
awakened from a haze.
Finally, made my way
through my maze.
Growth stunted, now alive,
Spreading as I speak.
It outgrows what I've done,
outgrows what made me weak.
Through selfless eyes, I've seen
what it is to love
Beyond all that is words,
into something that does.
Author notes
Just something. I know this piece is forced but I just couldn't find the words for how I was feeling....
Please tell me what you think
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It is good that you finally have focus on your life. Seeing everything clearly takes a little while to get used to. I hope that everything works out in your life. Good Job
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The end is cool-- beyond just words... into motion... basically. Great write. I really do love this one... I'm going to put it on my page!!
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Another beautiful, selfexploring poem.
You have a talent of saying much with a minimum of words.
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wow i really like this...why am i saying "wow' your a great writer and you aught to know that even without this awkward comment
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Hood-Winked!
What a wonderful write and I love the picture!! I think we all learn from our past mistakes in life and grow from them each day. I know I do. This is an amazing and thought provoking write.
You have just been Hood-Winked courtesy of the Poetic Bandits
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Hood-wink
I like it. It is like the picture (which is very cool!). It's light and refreshing, like looking out at the scene in the picture and realizing there's still some hope in the world.
Keep writing!
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"Hood-Wink!"
Though no one can make us change; we are changing within ourselves at all times. I feel in this piece you are exploring some change within yourself. It seems to be a change for good, being more aware, outgrowing what made you weak. At times even new better things are difficult to get used to.
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nice
this is nice, the end is the only part that feels forced to me,but I can relate, as I have been forcing a litlle latley to. This is good though. Share your secret of this magic potion that brought you out of this haze...I could use it myself...LOL -
Beautiful
Doesnt seemed forced to me. Seems honest and introspective. "It outgrows what I've done, outgrows what made me weak." Creative, mysterious and beautiful.
CP
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