A letter to my brother
Micheal oh Micheal how I miss you
The gentle way your cheek brushes
Mine when we hug
The way you yell but soothe me
At the same time
When I've done something
I shouldn't have
I miss your gentle touch when you are
There when I've fallen
But somehow you are still there for me
In my time of need
To help me, reassure me, as you always have
That you are there
I have my good days but most of them are bad
But I'll carry you in my heart
And memories forever
I love
Your Little Sister
Shanda
A Response
Come now little sister,
I hear your cries even if no one else does
And you most believe me when I say
If there was something I could do I would
I am your older brother
and I have lived my life as long as
God wanted me to
But it was my time to go home
Cry me a river if you must but no more
Cause I will see you again
I'll be the one at the pearly gates
Awaiting your arrival with open arms
I may not be there physically now
But I know you hold me in your heart
As I do you
I love you little sister
With all my love,
Micheal
Author notes
I lost my only brother 9 years ago this past April and it devasted me so bad I stopped doing alot of things that I enjoyed, writing was one of them. Then maybe 2 years after he passed I wrote this I hope you enjoy it as much as I do.
This poem was my chance to start a new with out forgetting about him.
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Comments
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Wow I'm so so sorry. But I must say this write was the bomb. ^^ I hope you are not as sad as you were. I don't like to see my friends in pain.
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First I would like to say I am very sorry to hear about your brother's passing. From what you write, he sounds like a wonderful person. Good job on this poem, and good luck,
-Snow -
this is so sweet and beautiful. you have managed to capture the relationship you had in gentle detail
"The gentle way your cheek brushes / Mine when we hug / The way you yell but soothe me / At the same time / When I've done something / I shouldn't have"
and your distinctive voices. i can hear both spoken, and Michael's response especially I can hear my older brother saying, the simple, straightforward manner of speech. What a wonderful way to honor him. -
This is a beautiful tribute. While I am sad for your loss I am grateful to GOD for the revelation you have received concerning death. It is really just a portal and all those we miss who have our hearts, will be seen again. They are only away on vacation, awaiting our arrival.
One Love,
John
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