You thank me for helping you
stay sober for a month,
like I'm your motivation.
Then why do you push me away?
I want to be there to help you
put the bottle down,
to help you save your money
to pay the rent.
You helped me discover my strength,
now it's your turn to be strong.
Does my affection scare you?
Is it too much for a man
like you to handle?
You've always gotten everything
you've wanted, and I know you want me,
your eyes gleam every time
I walk past you.
Of course, you've gotten almost
every woman you've wanted,
so why let a little girl
like me hold you back?
It's not like you really cared
about me, right?
Author notes
I'm thinking of changing the title. Suggestions would be great!
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Comments
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This is really good, you can feel the emotion, the pain and hurt throughout it. It is really well written, so congratulations on a great write and good luck.
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this is a challenge
a conflict that
plays tug of war
DW -
i like the conflict in this poem. it just feels honest. nice work
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I really like this piece. It feels like your confliced but thats not necessarily a bad thing. I like these parts: "of course, you've gotten almost every woman you've wanted, so why let a little girl like me hold you back?" and "It's not like you really cared about me, right?"
Very nice!
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