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Falling

Falling down
Down to Hell
With Satan
Will I rest
Eternally
Forever
Burned
Within his arms
I'll be
Falling
Forever more

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  • Riftkin gold member
    September 12, 2007

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    Tis a tale that one
    so you should not
    be feeling of
    the falling down so deep
    to land in the devils arms

    Riftkin


  • anaisnais
    August 28, 2007
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    Aw I dont expect someone so young to be looking so dark and deep. Its a good write but personally I like a lighter write!!Personal preference rules and theres no problem with your words! You appear experienced for your years, use the talent don't lose it!!


  • Mujina
    August 21, 2007

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    Wow I am not sure if youa re talking about a lover that is bad for you but yet it feels so good if that is the case I can relate to it. Good luck and thank you for entering.