Each night before she shuts her eyes,
She glances at the picture that sits on the locker beside her bed.
She breaths deeply and lets out a sigh for she is alone.
In the darkness of the room and the dead silence of the night,
she closes her tear filled eyes, but still she see's the image that proceeding her sleep she stared so longfully.
The morn arrives as does her wake, she sits up and rubs the sleep from her eyes,
again the picture is the centre of her thoughts.
In her mind she ticks off another lonely night, for soon the two dimensional image that is the picture of her love becomes a reality.
He holds her tight against his chest and the familiar sound of his heart beating reassures her that its not another dream, but he is there.
He smells her and holds her tight as he too has a picture by his bed,
he too stares, he too longs for the nights pass and his love to return.
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- Love by Madison Mary.
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Comments
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great write, every girl or almost every girl has a picture in their room of the one they love/ want. good luck thanks for entering
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great!
this poem reminds me of one of the most important people in my life his name is jared and he is a marine, he left for iraq and will be backin a few months but i keep his picture beside my bed and mine by his so it speaks to me sooo very strongly and it is beautifully written i adore it thank you so much for shareing it with me the best of luck
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Very emotional and creates a vivid picture. A parallel love it would seem that hasn't quite met up. I like it. However the flow is a little choppy since it lends more of a story-like tone but its not too bad. Its a little bit cliche but the way you handled it made it so I didn't notice.
I especially liked the lines : "In her mind she ticks off another lonely night, for soon the two dimensional image that is the picture of her love becomes a reality."
Good Luck in the Contests
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