His life he freely gives,
So you and I can continue to live.
He's on the front line, thinking of home,
And in an instant he could be gone.
But he does what he does,
For the people he loves.
He doesn't ask questions,
He never gives up.
He just keeps on fighting,
Keeps going on,
And not once does he get,
A single letter from home.
He feels alone, what are his reasons again?
Doesn't anyone even care about him?
He hides his emotions, no tears fall from his eyes,
No other Soldier will ever see him cry.
It's midnight...In Tennessee...
In the darkness, a telephone rings,
She picks it up, and asks "Who's this?"
Another name was added to the MIA list.
She cries in the night, but he'll never know,
He lost his life a day and a half ago.
She wishes she would've wrote him,
Taken all his calls...It's too late for that now...
BUT HE GAVE IT HIS ALL!
Author notes
Just wanted to say it is definitley not this way with my husband but being involved in the military you see men and women everyday who go through these things.
Actually, now that a lot of you know my story I can tell you why it wasn't this way with my husband.
I never missed a phone call when he was gone. If I did, I paid for it. He'd yell and scream at me over it, over not being there. The only times I missed a call it was for something like doctors appointments. We had a baby and if she was sick and I took her to the doctor and he happened to call while I was gone, I caught hell for it later.
Anyways... I appreciate everything our service men and women do. God bless them all.
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We didn't have phone calls from Nam. Just snale mail and few and far between.
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yes I can see
your fair reasonings for not being home, and again I think he needed to hear your voice,as no one can ever be home 24/7 thank you all for your service as a spouse and a service person...we support you for being there
Linda
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Congrats on all the trophies you won with this one; they were well deserved.
I think it could do with a little editing, just to tidy up some uneven lines, for example,
"His life he freely gives,
So you and I can continue to live."
Maybe, "He chose for his life to freely give
So you and I can continue to live."
But he does what he does,
For the people [that] he loves.
"He doesn't ask questions,
He never gives up."
"There are no questions that he asks,
Instead he just refuses to give up."
"He [x]just[x] keeps on fighting,
Keeps going on,"
And not once does he get,
A single letter from home.
He feels alone, what are his reasons again?
Doesn't anyone even care about him?
He hides his emotions, no tears fall from his eyes,
No other Soldier will ever see him cry.
It's [it is; spread it out] midnight...In Tennessee...
In the darkness, a telephone rings,
She picks it up, and asks "Who's this?"
Another name was added to the MIA list.
Just evening things out a ilttle if you see where I'm coming from
heartbreaking topic though!
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This is so stunning and really is a fine dedication. I love the flow of this piece. It's odd off all states you mention Tenn, and that's where I live
Thanks for your entry
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A beautiful entry to honor our soldiers who fight for us daily. Thank you for sharing this wonderful write. Wonderful rhytem and rhyme.
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Our soldier's risk so much, everyone should give them the utmost respect. Great write, thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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That was amazing chills i have chills
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A nice poem that you have written here.
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Girl this one gave me chills and made me cry....I know a guy in the army that grew up with my children, he lived next door and his only sibling a twin sister was killed in a wreck a few years before my son died...he does not have much to do with his parents because of their beliefs....so he confides in me through myspace....he sometimes get suicidal due to depression!
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You've written a requiem mass for too many within
this poem.
Thank you for entering Death contest.
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This was very well written. It was interesting and a pleasure to read. Flow and tone done very well.
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Thanks for your entry
This brings a lot of emotion out in me. I can feel the tears welling up inside. Good flow and structure. Good expression of emotion.
I encourage you to keep fighting for the peace. Be an example and a light for God.
God Bless
Tammy
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Wow-this is simply beautiful...
my boyfriend just lost his brother in Iraq-
But wonderful Job***
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Wow
Very good i wish my bro as in friend could have heard this before he went to Iraq it pains me to think of him while im here and nice ryhming -
he was strong while he faught no matter what he just kept going. Great write.
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I am too close it makes me hurt
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great write and great imagery in this write. YOu told a great story and it touched the heart. Goood job.
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Such a touching piece...My baby brother was over seas for a while..me and mom wrote him all the time...and he said many people over there got nothing from home...verry heart breaking...we would send something extra for the whole platoon, be it cards or hard candy....great job
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WOW! this poem is very powerful, the emotion in the words jump off the page to me. I loved all the verses of this poem, especially:
His life he freely gives,
So you and I can continue to live.
He's on the front line, thinking of home,
And in an instant he could be gone.
But he does what he does,
For the people he loves.
He doesn't ask questions,
He never gives up.
I look forward to reading more of your work. keep it up!!
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So full of truth
I've been to the trenches and watched the lonely fall then stood beside their loved ones as they regretted their non-involvement with their deployed husbands, sons, and boyfriends. The loneliness is the hardest part of our job!
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now i am really crying. This poem is so acurate in these days. My fiancee was engaged to a girl who never wrote him, and when he would call after his tank had been blown up and he amazingly survived, many times, she would yell at him for calling her late at night, or calling at all. Turns out the tramp was cheating on him. He will get many letters from me I can promis that, and he has my all, my fidelity, he is my hero.
You have a great way with words. so down to earth, so real and so plain, I love to read it. Great poem. I am going to send these to my man (with your permision?) he loves to read poetry.
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wow
There not much i can say to even begin to describe how amazing the poem is, i don't know if you really lost your husband seeing that your profile says your married, but i bet that this is something you worry about constantly,and to be able to voice your fears or even if it has happen tragdies, is a real amazing thing and really would just like to thank you for writing this
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I think this is powerful.
My first impression is of the understanding you have given to those in combat, and back home. Emotionally you have captured the empathy that i feel for all of our troops and thier families. There are no awkward parts to this and I would not ghange any of this. My favorite part is the fourth verse, however I liked everything about this poem. The title is heartrending, The first line really tells just what this poem is all about. The last line really tells just what happens all to often. this is a very great poem and I liked it very much.
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i know how it feels to have someone go. this is a really good poem with such feeling,.
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