i dont kare what u think or say
i know that i love u with all my heart
u can try to change my mind
but theres no way you can
because i love u more than life
and nothings goin to stop me
i just wish u can hold me forever
and tell me how much you care
because i love you dear
i love you and i want you to know
cuz it hurts me when u dont believe me
i dont like to cry but my love ones
always seem to make me
i feel so alone, i never felt this way before
i dont know if i should love u or hate u
im so confused about my feelings for you
i want you to hold me forever but i dont want u too
maybe cause im afraid on what u mite do
i dont wanna get hurt nomore, i did so many times before
i dont act tough but i never say what i truely feel
i dont like to hurt people but sumtimes i do
and it hurts me as much as it hurts them
Author notes
these all were from two yrs ago but this one was from a yr ago.. i havnt been writing nemore.. but plese tell me what i should be working on.. and try not to say everything lol =) thanks
Please tell me what you think
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This isn't bad, quite desperate, which is okay. It shows that you were writing during the time of the injury and had to put it all on paper. Probably flooded the paper though!
I will read a couple more of your poems and see, but don't be so hard on yourself, and never give up writing. Sometimes, ideas will not formulate until you start to just write. Other times, it just takes a while. Vocabulary is an issue that I can overlook because I get your overall meaning. It is a sad piece of work, and desperately wants to be expressed. I like it. -
Wow, I can honestly say that we have been here before. I think that this was a very good write, I especially like the part:
i love you and i want you to know cuz it hurts me when u dont believe me
It sounds like something I wrote when I was in High School. Good Write.
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