black cloud advances-
muscles twitch, prepared for flight
anticipating
nostrils flare and ears alert
as instinct plans survival
eyes reflecting wild
lightening flashes, hooves thunder
racing for escape-
the barn door swings open to
sweet feed in a warm, dry stall
A contest entry
- Group Contest Haiku Senryu And Tanka and Lovers of Oriential Art by Draig aine.
2250 points, ended May 21, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please, tell me what you think.
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a most excellent tanka
two lovely tankas, well done, enjoyed it very much
as they say tanka on , thank you for entering my contest best of luck
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wonderful title. I love the way you end this one. It really made me smile.
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Those last two lines were the answer I needed. grand imagery and topic.
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Great imagery I loved these lines; "eyes reflecting wild
lightening flashes, hooves thunder
racing for escape-"
Good luck
LISA
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So much wonderful imagery presented within your Double Tanka, very beautiful!
Good luck to you!
Des
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These are excellent tankas. You can sense their motions and that is not easily done with verse such as this. Well done
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I could almost smell the thunder and the fear of this brave Equine
Good luck in the contest 
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I do love this tanka form...you have aroused beautiful images within my mind as I read your well designed tanka chain. Thank you.
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Thanks for reading and commenting on this. Did you see the horse?
Thanks again.
qt
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This sums up horses so well, half the time they don't know what they are afraid of themselves silly things. But arent they beautiful.
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Thank you quakietree for the beautiful painting you have finely graced the canvass of my mind. Wonderful imagery, nice double tanka, thank you for sharing, good luck. Have a beautiful day, Ken IBT
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