Come to the Dark Side, said he
But what if it hurts?, said I
Pain is pleasure in the end, said he
Then make me yours, said I.
Why am I so drowsy?
Everything seems so vibrant, but I'm so sleepy
Moonlight blinds me
Everything is like an artist's canvas.
Come closer my sweet, said he
Please be gentle, said I
Tht pain is momentary, said he
Take me now, said I.
Why is my neck throbbing?
I feel as if my whole body pulses in my neck,
My senses have exploded
The world is suddenly alive.
How do you feel?, said he
Like my body is floating, said I
See, it wasn't that hard, said he
I've joined in the Dark side!, said I.
Author notes
This is the first part in what I hope will be a series of poems. Enjoy, comment, tell me what you think needs changing.
A contest entry
- Wow Me by Mujina.
600 points, ended August 27, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like it!!!
It's really good.
I love vampires, so reading your poems interest me a lot!
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I really like it. Gotta love the dark side. I've heard they have cookies.
Poems dealing with vampires are usually cool, but this one's awesome. I like the set up of the he said/said I thing. That made the poem interesting and held the reader's interest. Well done
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it needs......nothing at all, cool work, very entertaining , the way it leads you line by line it's very cool, WELL DONE!!
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love this take on the turning
into a vampire, that you
have painted for all to see
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I luv it...Nuff said.
~Lovelikeblood
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lol this is cool
well done
i like the he said i said
love it sis
keep writing
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