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Useless Transformation

Missing image
I can not speak
I will not speak
You have silenced my soul

Filling me with thoughts of tomorrow
When there was to be no tomorrow
Warm lips that betrayed an innocent heart
A heart that is now frozen solid
weighing heavy on my being
You took all that I was and transformed
me into who I am now
Ironically losing interest because I was not
what you wanted after all

I can not speak
I will not speak
You have silenced my soul
 
 
 
 

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  • Dalaney gold member
    August 30, 2007
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    a poem bookended with a striking beginning and ending...
    This blew me away...Love, Lane


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 22, 2007
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    this really words with the picture and I like how the first three lines are repeated at the end.

  • Hekate gold member
    August 22, 2007

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    Yeah, this fits will in with the picture and I think all of us have been down this road before. Well done and good luck

  • markgrif gold member
    August 22, 2007
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    nice
    Strong
    Well Done


  • Naridill
    August 22, 2007
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    Very strong entry. Alot of powerful images beyond the first image.


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    August 22, 2007

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    So much emotion in this piece. Very Well Done!

    "You took all that I was and transformed
    me into who I am now
    Ironically losing interest because I was not
    what you wanted after all"

    Powerfully written words that most all of us have felt at one time or another. Additionally, I loved the way you started and ended the poem with the samee emotional stanza.
    Great write! I wish you the best in the contest!
    Take care

    David


  • tomisb gold member
    August 21, 2007

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    Pygmalion left behind or metamorphisis of a spare soul? In breathing deep into the light I find the changes we create within ours selves are often from a catalyst we dream belongs in anothers heart. Yet I find, as hard as it is to admit, that I am to blame for my state, not the one who quit.

    Your words are thick with innuendo and drive your thought so nicely home. The picture you have taken into the psyche nicely done. I enjoyed the read mightly.

    Love, Tom B.


  • Whoochi gold member
    August 21, 2007
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    Gorgeous pic and even better words to match....Best of luck


  • Lily otv
    August 21, 2007

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    A very nice write and realistic in that we often 'change things for the better' but then find it isn't what we want at all. I think I do it every day lol

  • Laura
    August 21, 2007

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    ohhh noreen what the hell have you done here!! you have taken this picture away from me and made it your very own... this is amazing love xxx


  • Cinnarry gold member
    August 20, 2007
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    wonderful interpretation lady!

  • deleteit
    August 20, 2007

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    I think this desribes the picture and then some! It is funny how we sometimes feel the need to make changes only to be left with empty hands of our choice after realizing it really was not what was wanted afterall. Sucks really. You penned those thoughts really well. Good luck in the contest
  • x-Black-Butterfly-x silver member
    August 20, 2007

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    wow this was amazing much better than my entrys lol
    i the words were strong and brough the mid of the girl in the picture alive
    it gave the pivture a voice
    well done and best of luck

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