walking downtown searching for something
not knowing what it is
the aching in thte pit of your stomach
will not leave you
THEN
you see HER
in all her beauty
with her short black hair
big hazel eyes with long lashes
there is the most beautiful girl
you have ever assended your eyes upon
as you stair at her questions
start to race through your mind
how old is she?
will her sign macth your own?
why are there red marks on her arms?
what is her favorite color?
will she ever love you as you
have loved her all your life
just not knowen it?
standing there stairing at her shamelessly
she makes eye contact and in that instint
you get all the answers
nineteen
scorpio-a perfect match
she owns a cat that hates her
her favorite color is black
yes she will love you because
for as long as she can remember
she has loved you and not knowen it
Author notes
it was somtthing that poped into my head as i was looking at the contest so i entered i like it if you think there is a way to improve it let me know
A contest entry
- IM NEW TO AP by givemetheworld.
475 points, ended August 22, 2007, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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this was cute! I really liked your use of language and the imagery. It's a little rough, but it's still really good! :
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hahahaha, a delight, with many feelings and thoughts. keep penning and things will get better.
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this is wonderful. my one suggestion is the background and font are a bit fuzzy. other than that i think it is perfect. thank you for sharing this with me and i am looking forward to reading more from you. viyanna rosemarie
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well this is very good and i thank you so much for entering. its so not what i expected but love how you made it your own
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