The full moon mourns the tragic loss of his child,
And I grieve with him, for the lost life of a true hero,
Who left the world as the brave man he was,
Father to a newborn boy child, Teddy,
Husband to a gifted Auror and natural shape-shifter,
Whose life was also stolen by the cruelty of murder,
Loyal friend to many,
Bitten by a savage, blood-thirsty monster in the fresh beginnings of youth,
Whose contamination changed his life in its early process of unfurling,
Evil and an irreversible curse tainting his childhood,
A bleak future glared spitefully at him,
And life seemed to take a terrible dislike towards him,
In the days he should only have had to worry about trading chocolate frog cards,
Wizards shuddered at the realization of what he was,
Avoided him in fear and spat in his face with disgust,
But despite it all, he plowed his way through the rough times,
Wound his life’s path around the obstacles,
Found his true identity behind the painful transformations,
Ghost of the Shrieking Shack,
Wolf behind the Whomping Willow’s unfailing guard,
He received an education in spite of his sad secret,
Made eternal friendships- friends who put their own lives,
In the unpredictable hands of jeopardy just to keep him company,
Passed on his knowledge as teacher of Defense Against the Dark Arts,
Helped battle the dark armies of evil, opening his doors to peril,
Dying valiantly in the sacrifice,
And even rose high enough to start a family,
Which was shattered unfairly by the cold hands of fate,
Barely before it bloomed.
In blood he may have been half beast,
But by heart, Remus Lupin was as full as human could be…
Author notes
This goes under Option 1 in the contest... hope you like it!
A contest entry
- Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows!! *SPOILERS* by NooNiThEWitcH.
385 points, ended November 28, 2007, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This does not work as poetry, however, it IS an excellent piece of prose writing, and if my math is correct, you wrote this when you were 13? You have a future in prose, no question!
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He did not die
I like it it's descriptive and actually helps others get a feel for his tormented state. I think the wording was awesome.
But he did not die!
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This is very very beautiful. Though you put tooooo many commas and no full-stops at all! that bugged but otherwise, I liked your choice of words, your representation of Lupin's entire life and your poem overall.
Thank you so much for entering in my contest.
Keep on writing, and good luck.
If you have entered another poem please IM me the titles of your poems.
Nooni
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this was a very lovely piece for Remus Lupin. you did an excellent job. good luck in the contest!
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haven't read anything by you in a LONG LONG time ! =)
it's good
nice to read something differnt every now and again
SeeJ
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hey thanks for your comment and always being there to read my stuff
yeah its been a really long time since i posted anything up here. i stopped visiting the site when the whole layout thing changed and my friends became bored with it. i've still been writing... just haven't put anything up. i wrote this when i came across this contest... i normally dont write fresh writes for a contests but it really inspired me so i wrote this whole thing up the day i saw the contest. do you read/ watch harry potter? thanks again!
Julia
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