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Apparition

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Apparition

I dwell in the graveyard at night.
I’m a ghastly vision of fright.
I search in the dark for my love.
Over crypts I float from above.

I consented to be his wife
and that evening he took my life.
Over crypts I float from above.
I search in the dark for my love.

Each night I am given new birth
and ripped from the womb of the earth.
I search in the dark for my love.
Over crypts I float from above.

What do I do when I find him;
can I punish him for his sin?
Over crypts I float from above.
I search in the dark for my love.

So now as a specter I dwell
and long for release from this hell.
I search in the dark for my love.
Over crypts I float from above.

 

 

 

Author notes

Mirrored Refrain
The Mirrored Refrain is a rhyming verse form constructed by Stephanie Repnyek.
The poem is formed by three or more quatrains where two lines within the quatrain are the "mirrored refrain" or alternating refrain.
The rhyme scheme is as follows: xaBA, xbAB, xaBA, xbAB, etc..
x represents the only lines that do not rhyme within the poem. A and B represent the refrain.

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  • Judith Chandler
    October 27

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    Great choice of form. I like the dramatic feeling to this sceptral piece.

    Thank you for entering my contest.


  • Swan song gold member
    August 22, 2007

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    that is pretty good there. I liked it and you did not miss a beat, I like the way it flowed and the strong rhyme


  • Nature Song silver member
    August 22, 2007

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    I search in the dark, over the crypts. Love this style and format you have chosen for this poem. Great penning and rhyme! Well thought out, and what would you do to released from the at hell. ~Sie


  • Whoochi gold member
    August 22, 2007

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    I dont like see darkness from my DOLLFACE however that said, this is lovely, the thought, the tale, the creativity and the form all blend to make it a nice tightly woven gorgeous tale...sad but creative...excellent pic too! Good luck!


  • pugsforlyfe
    August 22, 2007
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    sad

    so very sad but i liked it! I also like pugs! or do I? how would you know?


  • Tercil gold member
    August 21, 2007

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    You so expect darkness when inviting it, it is in the traits that gives another life or death situation, life, where they've become the unrest and death, to be ever floating until something or other gives them piece, eeby geebies, !!!


  • Desire gold member
    August 21, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Magnificent piece You have penned!
    Form Queen
    Wonderful
    Powerful images!!
    Love it!!
    Thank You for sharing this
    Wooooooooooo hoooooooooooooo

    Many blessings to You in the contest
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Hetha gold member
    August 21, 2007

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    This is spooky, nice, flowing, haunting, AWESOME!
    I'm envious of how you paint with words so well, but in a good way..an appreciative way. You definitely have the skill and talents I lack in this direction, but I learn so much from just reading your pieces, and it's wonderful! Good luck in the contest!

    Love,
    Hetha


  • captain howdy
    August 21, 2007

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    This poem just sort of keeps going effortlessly and smoothly once it begins. Beautiful and sad all at once, this is wonderful! I think this one is my new favorite by you!


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    August 20, 2007

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    Exellent! I learn so much from reading your poems. Thank you so much for sharing about the forms you write in! Pam


  • ellipsist
    August 20, 2007
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    I love the image of:

    "and ripped from the womb of the earth."

    extremely well done!

  • takin in tears
    August 20, 2007

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    Very nice write I feel the endless torture the apparition goes through each night. The writing style is unusal to me as im sure mine was to you thnks for checkin my stuff out i will roam ur site some more.
    -Takin


  • HaleyMary
    August 20, 2007

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    Powerful write. Fantastic imagery. This made me think of a soul who can't rest and feels sad and wants to get revenge for what was done to them. I also liked the second line in the last stanza. It made me think of how depending on how a person's life is, life can seem to be like hell if they feel like they're in fear or sad about life. Good luck in the contest.


  • Marctheman
    August 20, 2007

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    What can i say about you Amara, you are you, you always gave us something to think about. it is a pleasure reading your work.

    great job
    Master Amara


  • soulfultia gold member
    August 20, 2007

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    Hypnotic is how I felt with this piece, like it just kept rolling in my mind...over and over again. I think I can chant it now...even while the read has concluded. You are a talent my friend...quite a find and my pleasure to read!! ~tia


  • PerVirtuous
    August 20, 2007

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    Amera my love, this is a 'reach out and grab' kind of piece that has grabbed at my very being. The imagery is divinely written with a supreme knowledge that one can only find with the strength that is developed by faith! This speaks volumes and it revives my soul. I don't see the dark in this ... I see the beauty! I don't see the dark in this, I see the beauty hidden in this message!


  • Laura
    August 20, 2007

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    wow love this is brilliant and whoooo what a picture .. i dont think you'll need it but i'll send it ya anyway good luck with the contest this has gold stamped for sure xxx


  • JohnnyD gold member
    August 20, 2007

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    Excellent write and fab picture to go with it, I may need to do one of these if I have time.
    skywalker says this poem is very deep, I agree, six feet deep


    dad


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    August 20, 2007
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    Spooky in a great way.
    Yummy form.

    Be Well


  • StarEyes
    August 20, 2007

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    Holy Smokes, Miss Form Queen!!! I am trying to keep up with all these forms, and you just keep showing me more and more! How do you expect one to keep up with them all?

    Now on to this one This is amazing!!! I love the right and the form!!!! What a great job on this one! Best of luck in this contest!!

    and much love

    Nyetta


  • sunny day
    August 20, 2007

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    This is another hauntingly beautiful piece that you have penned and it sent a chill up my spine. Your rhythm and rhyme are spot on as always and I love the use of refrain lines as they add so much power to a write. A very interesting form that you used here and I have yet to try one. You captured the essence of the picture with your artwork so lovely. I am left breathless once again by the depth of your words that fill me with such vivid imagery. Thank you for sharing with all of us and best wishes in the contest. It sounds golden. Love you my friend, Joyce


  • capricornpoet
    August 20, 2007

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    eerie

    A lightness and a darkness prevails in this poem with images so well endowed, one is carried into this tale of ghostly apparition..Inspiring form , you do it so well and with verve.

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