Follow me into abysmal nights, locked in broken purgatory;
hear the screams of undead sirens and the growl of Hell itself.
Wading in rivers of cyanide, your body devoured by lakes of arsenic
and let it guide you to the tainted gate you long to find.
Listen to lithium cries of fallen angels;
listen to the song of the undead; harpies of your soul.
Stare blankly into eternal nothingness
and become lost in illuminated delusions.
Tell me lullaby lies, candy coated in glitter angst -
watch vanilla remedies swirl and collide in front of you,
fusing forever into a demented sunburst twilight
as napalm wishes flood over you.
Take my hand and I will lead you on your way,
where morbid Goddess' and damned Kings await -
Follow me into Hell's mouth and lose yourself along the way;
breaking slowly and crumbling to your knees.
I will show you the torture you showed me,
the pain, sharp as knives against pale skin, vividly revealed
as dark illusions bathe in crimson and purge your soul
so that all you have left is this mannequin corpse.
I shall be your puppet master, pulling every ill string left
until you fall and degrade into shadow bane pleas
which will be marooned upon distant lands for all to hear
as you endure every heart breaking second of this agony.
Bittersweet revenge glazed over with digust -
lacing my words in purest vodka as my eyes bleed tears of rum;
This prison that you shall know, deep within Gorgon's lair,
mirrors the disaster that you put me through.
Enjoy this moment for the rest, shall last you a lifetime.
Author notes
First poem I've written in a long time. Enjoy. [probably won't make sense to most, but it works for me]
Thanks to kirbysman [Paul] for some help on this.
Edit: As par contest rules, I read and commented on "Lonely Girl" which can be found here:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3355180
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- Your BEST Prewrite! - For Mike [degarmo] - by Never Fall in Love.
950 points, ended October 29, 2007, 130 entries
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Stare blankly into eternal nothingness
and become lost in illuminated delusions.
Hmmm ...
That above was my favourite part. I don't know why - but I was thinking of evanescence all while reading this - strange, I know.
There's still something with this. You've used some phrases such as 'candy coated' and glitter that well, it seems so overused and for you to use it again. Also, the constant use of'I' sounded disturbing.
Good Luck in the contest and thank you for entering
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Perfect
Amazing, really. All the words fell in perfectly, like it was factory made, yet with a personal touch... Great write! -
Amazing depths used to decry revenge sought for transgressions.Dark piece indeed. And it oozes agony and anger.
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Amazing
Wow
Just wow
love it!
♥Keara
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And my grampy helped huh?
I luv him lol. Wonderful job Kris, it makes sense since I know the general reasoning for the write Bravo, it comes off as strong and meaningful as you wanted it to. Im proud of you and this is a piece of art!!! Keep the pen flowing!!
Always
Emily
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