I know you think I am just a tool
in someone else's hand
But let me assure you, baby,
I am in absolute control.
It was my idea to run my tip
over your shivering, whimpering body.
OOOOOOH. That made me feel GOOD.
That wild, wide eyed look
in your big, bright eyes, girl,
was a great bonus.
I would have done all this
just for that.
That first deep thrust, girl.
That was all me.
The way you shrank from me.
The way you struggled.
You were all I ever hoped for.
And the red, spreading smoothly
over your white dress.
The contrast between your skin,
your dress and your rich red blood.
So hot.
Hot on me.
Raising the temperature of my cold steel
to a searing ninety eight point six degrees.
Like you knew what I wanted….
knew what I needed
and you were giving it to me.
I regret that other stuff.
I don't know how one human being
can do that to another.
I guess I could have stopped him
but it doesn't fit into my plans.
As long as he thinks he wields me
he is in my power.
Power. Delicious.
The heat you provided has cooled.
I see your light dim and die.
I wish I had thought to ask you
if you had a sister.
Author notes
28. blood/gore
A contest entry
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Uniquely Brutal. Right?
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fuckin nice
sweeet -
in my opinion, it is not graphic enough. too much emotion not enough physical gory imagery.
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Well done.
You understood my contest requirements with respect to the dark option.
Keep exploring this side of yourself and see what comes out.
Its cathartic to release the inner self.
Thanks for entering.
Previn -
In a way I'm really just Idk, this is just slightly wayy to graphic for me && my contest.
&& if i could get past that I'm sure it would be a great entrant.
Thank you for entering
♥
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uniquely brutal, thats a bit of an understatement lol. its a great write and i love the imagery but its not really my style. i like dark stuff but not too too dark, you know what i mean. thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest.
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