This morning I woke up not longing for this
You looked right at me, a moment of bliss
You lean in and put your hand on my thigh
Tingling sensations puts me on a high
For years so before we weren't friendly like this
I look at you now, so longing for bliss
Fingers running though hair not wanting to miss
The pivotal moment of the Untasted Kiss
Author notes
Thank You to XxXNiCoLeXxX for this topic in the freewrite section that inspired this.
In a list
A contest entry
- For Poets With 10 Or Less Trophys Only- PIF by Mercury Rising.
550 points, ended September 25, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a really lovely and lyrical poem that was a pleasure to read. Best of luck in my contest.
David
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Oh...I loved the concept of your poem...the unexpected bliss at what we thought was just an ordinary moment would turned out to be a special one...I also loved the flow and rhyme of your poem...very lovely indeed...
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thanks for sharing this.i liked this very much. thanks for entering my contest and best of luck. well written and a wonderful read. thanks again for entering. i hope to read more from you soon.
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Awwww the first kiss. What wonderful emotions you have expressed within your poem. Such a beautiful and full of amazing imagery write. I so enjoyed reading
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Thank you
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I like the feel, flow and the rhyming in this. And the anticipation that you can feel in this poem - awaiting that 'untasted kiss'.
Nice write!
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I like the flow of this poem, I actually think the flow of the poem brings the reader the same feeling as the one receiving that kiss.wow! Well done, I have only once before read a poem about a kiss that have done that to me, its such a simple action, but you have really created an intense moment.thanx I guess…
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